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Random Poem:

Deep Forest
lipbalm

She enters the forest
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On a well groomed trail.
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Clean, dark, trodden soil
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Skipping brightly
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Across the soft moss.  
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High, tight ponytail
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Bouncing behind her.
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A smile on her face.
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A few clouds roll over.
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She takes little notice.
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Does not pay attention
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To the increasing fog
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Or darkness.
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The way that more leaves
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Lay upon the trail.
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The rocks are larger.
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The roots are longer.
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And it all escapes her.
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At once it appears.
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Her range of sight has minimized
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To the large trees surrounding her.
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The dark enveloping her.
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She looks down.
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Where has the trail gone?
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What seemed once so bold and steady
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Has now faded
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Into oblivion.
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Her jaw drops
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Fear sweeps through her
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So fast
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With the now howling wind
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Her body tremors.
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Drops to her knees.
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Huddles tightly
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Against the tree nearest.
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A cold wind
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Whisks her hair around her shoulders.
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And that’s when
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She begins to see
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What lies beneath
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The heavy veil
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Of black.
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Strong
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Fearsome
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Vicious
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Yet somehow,
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Invisible.
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How to fight an enemy?
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That seems in being
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Invisible?
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Its muscular arm
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Reaches out from its cover.
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Veins bulging.
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Towards what beats under her ribs
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Which is now
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Gripped in the most extreme sort of terror.
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She then realizes
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What the fingers are grasping at.
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The layer of light.
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Which has so mysteriously appeared.
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Is being peeled away at.
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She feels it in her heart.
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Which has presented this shield.
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And is now being peeled away.
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Piece
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By
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Piece.
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Standing up slowly
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And now knowing the only thing
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Which can save her now
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Running away from the beast frantically
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She searches for a way out
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She is discouraged
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For all of the scenery resembles itself
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But continues on
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The adrenaline pumping
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How come it is taking so long
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To leave a place that was entered so quickly?
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One foot
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In front of the other
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She tells herself.
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Push
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Just a little bit farther.
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Branches
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Grab her hair and scratch her face
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Roots threaten to trip her.
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The darkness hides large rocks which block her way.
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The thumping of the monsters heavy footsteps become
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Closer
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And louder
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Her heart seems to quicken to a vibrate.
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And finally
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She emerges into a bright meadow
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And collapses on the ground
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For now she knows that she has entered a sanctuary.
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Protected by the light.
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Never shall she look back
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Even though she can hear
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Him screaming
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And shaking the trees with his large fists
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Hidden by the dark.
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Not even
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When the forest becomes inviting once again
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And seems safe and beautiful and virtuous.
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She shall never again succumb
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to the false
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illusion.
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