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Random Poem:

Thanks Jack
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Things have become
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more delicate, since
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my eating ceased.
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No need for food after
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I've seen all that died.
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I've seen my father die.
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I've seen my brother die, eyes went vacant
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in his faint life.
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I've seen my silent sister die, no words
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to let me know where she was going.
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I've watched the distasteful thought die.
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I've watched the perverse fantasy die.
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I've seen the tacky flower die.
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The drama plays itself out.
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The overdramatic watches itself cartoon.
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I've watched  my friend Danny return
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  to his old neighborhood in the Bronx,
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   where none of his friends survived
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     their habit to smack.
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I've watched Wiley Coyote die.
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I've seen people lose their jobs.
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I've lost a $10 spot & I really need it!
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My co-worker goes home to a shelter, now.
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  Her home was leveled by the storm.
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Someone was impaled by a street sign
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  in that storm.
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Jaime liked everything in the raw--now,
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  she's sick.
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I've watched Daffy Duck go nuts.
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Her husband went for a walk
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  to the end of the block & shot himself--
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    the cancer in his face was too painful
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       for him to take.
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I've seen good people turn violent, fast.
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I've seen promiscuity go out the window.
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My buddy from Iraq couldn't shake the war,
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   when he came home.
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His legs have degenerated into sticks, no muscle
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   mass, no body fat, only bones to sustain.
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He has on good hand & waits to die.
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Where is God in all of this?--
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    Create in me..
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He keeps fighting--doesn't know how to stop
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    being a marine.
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I've seen the trail die away to an open field--
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    no prairies left.
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I've seen maggots in the catfood--
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   my roomate, jobless, sleeps until 3
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      in the afternoon, doesn't clean.
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I've seen sweet basil blacken, tomatoes crystal,
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   the nightshade & thistle take over--
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       the sage survived with the lambs breath
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         lining the edge.
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Nothing can stop a star
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   from dying--it ate
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     too many ashes from
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       a god's suicide--
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         its heart exploded.
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I knew of a large man whose heart
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   exploded--a nanoblipped supenova.
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I've seen a computerized rendition
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  of a supernova--
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    its exploding light can be seen
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      thousands of light years away.
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Its what we're made of.
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I've watched a river swallow--wonder what it
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  swallows in its life.
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I've seen bridges who bade goodbye--
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  a poet still falling from Washington Avenue.
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I've seen poetry blunt, slur, silence,
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  waken, crap, grow,
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                              move.
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And die--die in its crap.
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I've never seen jack, never seen Jack,
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   never seen jack, Jack die.
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Thanks Jack.
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