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Random Poem:

The Subway (Part 1)
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I saw her on the subway train.
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I was to shy to say anything.
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And like most times I see a beautiful women, I got butterflies.
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Except this time it felt like I had more than I usually do.
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She was at the front of the train.
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So I tried to move toward her.
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But something was holding me back; I just couldn’t do it.
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The train came to a halt and I missed my chance.
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I will probably never see her again.
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I keep thinking what a idiot I am.
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The next day I was coming home from work.
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So I took the subway like always.
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As usual the train was crowded.
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So I stood next to the door and held on to the rail.
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I rode on the train for about 15 minutes.
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When the train came to another stop.
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I got the butterflies again.
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It wasn’t until after the train started up again.
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That I noticed why I had them.
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She was standing right beside me.
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I was so nervous because I tried make small talk.
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My heart was beating twice as hard as it usually does when I tried to say.
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“Hi.”
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I told her.
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“Hi”
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She replied back.
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“Do you ride the subway very often?’’ I asked.
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“Yeah pretty often.” She told me.
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I tried everything I could to keep the conversation going.
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Some how it worked.
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We continued the conversation until we came to her stop.
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She told me she wanted to see me again.
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So I suggested dinner Friday night; she said yes.
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I had a date.
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