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Random Poem:

a thought on everything in a simple mind in but a minute.
silentspring

blessed faces on broken down posterboard
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lining a road with the carcass of dreams
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given up tires leave a body quite lonely
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and rusted shut doors break escape
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from a tightening chest.
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what was expected from lingering voices
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and tear-covered pages of lines never read
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a trunk filled with folded up notes
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and lists of hopes and wishes forgotten to melt
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in summer heat unchecked
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a letter in the mail with directions to always
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where you went was beyond the point
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two stars to the left and straight on til morning
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was just a moment too far for me
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but morning was far from the horizon's deathbed
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and the light from the moon reflected wishful thinking
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youth flitted with thoughts of a trip to forever
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the promise of fresh air on lungs long wasted
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started thoughts long covered by grey stones
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the greatest let down of a dream to fly
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was a rusty old car headfirst
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in a tree
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tired of lovely poems and broken bones
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lost hours on wooden floors that twist in knots.
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the paint is falling off in little chips
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as the violets turn into a sheltered pot
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of bad smelling decay.
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i wonder how plants thrive off water and if, perhaps,
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the blood i no longer need would suffice.
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as i see water will no longer fill a devoid body. my thirst.
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just with the passing of the river tides reminds me
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of days when breathing came through lungs.
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lungs not hardened with the plaster
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i breathe in excess everyday.
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nothing should come between the dancing rituals of lost lovers.
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nor should anything hobble down crooked backstreets in the late night. stare with closed eyes.
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its the stars i watch. no longer with desire to see them.
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but at a loss for how they should wither like the lillies i cannot plant.
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the small light surrounded by darkness is but once more
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another illusion of the good that everyone
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seems to tempt me with.
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but can desire of a hero really create one? and does not the vast emptiness surpass the short-lived brightening of the stars.
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wooden planks serenely tempt my mind into those hazy days. long past moments, i used to cry for.
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and the bottles i collect no longer filled with oxygen are but a hesitation.
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tripping through day by day collections into a year that no one will recognize as my own.
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with sticky-note reminders, heralding the highlights of
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a true life without possesion.
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can it be possible to lose the will to live and by doing so surrender to the fate of all others?
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the fate that only some may see as death with routine functions
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i once was capable of but now seem as only a pathetic ritual must.
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sometimes it seems as though the fairy tale ending is ironic
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but perhaps not in a day-and-age long from the once-upon -a-times i remember
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chances are the princess is adorned in too tight jeans and a ponytail.
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but perhaps those are the ones who pull through the wicked days.
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maybe they were the ones curled up in dark closets.
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perhaps, alone on a pier in a raging storm laughing at the gusts of awful
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that maniacally ambush their eyes,
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ripping tears that otherwise would not come.
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chances are slight they fought themselves with blades
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mangled their flesh to feed the dying violets in their life.
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chances are thin they lost hope to cold eyes
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driven to shame and the pursuit of a life less restless.
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yes, slim though the chances may be. there is still that
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pinnacle. that stare of a leftover star that is wrapped
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in a vacuum of dark anger. and yet death would not be an option.
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because a chance is still there
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