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Random Poem:

Tattered Wings
Mariposa

Softly I sat upon the edge of something all too deep
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I could feel your love circulating through my very veins
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You told me it was your heart that I could keep
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No more was it that I felt loneliness’ pains
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No words could comprehend what I felt inside
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It didn’t matter how far away you were from me
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It was by your love that I would now abide
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This was true love, or so it seemed to be
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You gave me wings with which I used to fly
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The love I had for you was the wind that I used to soar
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I could feel your arms around me as time passed us by
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I wanted to be by your side forever and more
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Your kind smile and compassion made me feel so warmed
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I felt my love for you increase each and every day
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It was for you that my heart and soul reformed
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I never knew what it was that I couldn’t in words, say
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You took away my pains from the past that seemed all too much to bare
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I felt my old wounds and scars being healed by your soft touch
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Then I knew it was you and only you, it was our lives that I wanted us to share
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I wondered if it was possible to care for one single person so very much
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Then one day everything I held dear shattered
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Your angry words hit into me like a glass shard
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Suddenly not all too much mattered
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I had started falling completely and all too hard
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I could feel my wings getting torn apart before me
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My mind was racing with all my memories of you
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It wasn’t you, but this endless darkness that I then could see
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Right through my heart was where a cold wind blew
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Slowly and softly snow was falling to the ground
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You were sitting right next to me by my side
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I whimpered as you gradually walked on by, like I made no sound
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You didn’t even look back or miss a stride
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I couldn’t even raise my voice to say how much my heart hurt
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It was as if our love got carried away like dust in a gentle breeze
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From the ground was where I wouldn’t let my eyes avert
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It seemed that you were able to leave me behind with ease
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The feathers from my wings layed tattered and strewn upon the floor
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No longer white or pure, they scattered about in the silence
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I could feel the blood from my open wounds on me, at peace no more
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Seems I was fighting death now with utter defiance
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Without your love, and without a soul, I remember you, and there is only pain
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I am now heading for the clouds high up above in the sky
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Tears pour from my eyes endlessly, harder than torrential rain
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It is upon tattered wings that I now fly...
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