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Random Poem:

What I See
danamom

What I See
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Somehow, you got through my barriers
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and made me love you
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I look back sometimes at night
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when sleep won’t come
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and try to find the chink in my armor
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that let you in
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but all I see
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are pictures of us
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laying on the hood of the car,
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holding hands, watching meteor showers
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us on the couch, me in front of you
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watching movies all might long
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you holding our first child and the love
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and awe on your face
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I blink and the pictures change
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to you pushing me all the way around the lake in my wheelchair
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as careful with me as you were with our babies
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you holding me, letting me cry
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even when neither of us knows why I’m crying
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us watching the first sunsets in our new house
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in our new lives on OUR property
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sometimes when the house is very still,
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I see what hasn’t happened just yet
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you holding our first grandchild and the love
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and awe on your face
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you walking our daughter down the aisle to her new life
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and the love, hope and sadness on your face
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you choking up when it’s time to
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“Give her away”
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and you looking on as they lay me to rest
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and the pain and loneliness on your face
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and the gratitude too and I hear you say
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“Now she’ll never have to hurt again”
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But honey, you’re wrong
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I’ll hurt till you’re with me again.
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DLB 8/9/05 ©
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