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a day at the lake

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my uncle	1
and his firefighter friends	2
anchored their boats	3
in a semi-circle.	4

my cousins and i	5
and the other teenage boys	6
openly drank beer from the coolers	7
and watched a clutch of girls	8
sunning themselves	9
on shore.	10

a big one with bug eyes	11
swam out to us,	12
my friend	13
thinks your cute,	14
she said to me.	15

a brunette	16
in a yellow two-piece	17
waved to me	18
from shore.	19

we grabbed more beer	20
and swam in.	21

dana's family	22
lived in an rv	23
at the campground.	24

she said i had eyes	25
like the people	26
on soap operas.	27

she took my hand,	28
we swam out	29
behind one of the boats.	30

the water	31
was waist deep.	32

she slid her bikini off,	33
then my trunks.	34

she put her hands	35
above her head	36
palms down	37
on the outboard motor.	38

i ran my fingers	39
over her back	40
being careful	41
to avoid	42
the cigarette	43
burns.	44

some of them	45
were fresh.	46

she turned around,	47
fear in her eyes.	48
does that make me ugly?	49

the opposite,	50
i said.	51

we built a bonfire	52
on shore	53
and shared a simple peace	54
until the night	55
turned our page.	56

04/15/07

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