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Santa's Heroes
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They're going like the clappers
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The Elves in Santa's shed
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They only stop for pee poos
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And they never go to bed
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'Cos they're so busy working
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On every kiddy's dream
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And they will never falter
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No matter how extreme
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And when at last they're finished
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They'll load up Santa's sled
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Then tip-toe up to Rudolph
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And paint his nose bright red.
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9 Dec 02

Rated 8 (7.8) by 3 users.
Active (3): 4, 7, 10
Inactive (10): 4, 5, 5, 8, 8, 9, 10, 10, 10, 10

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'Pee poos' is creepy. The rhyming here is really well done, but I think you just need to add a bit more content. It ends a bit too soon...
 — Moose

Hum. I guess I missed something. First line is awesome.
 — quinn

elf piss etc
 — unknown

Damn you Tobias Pearl!!
 — onklcrispy

Bloody hell! This has two tens!! .... and there's no sign of FrChris!!!??
 — unknown

I'd read this to my grand-daughters but I'll change some of the words in the first stanza...very cute but is it Christmas again already?!!!!!
 — Isabelle5

The first stanza is awesome!
 — unknown

Ah, here's FrChris now. I guess this poem is just really well-liked for it was given two tens. It's probably well-liked because it is playful. I agree with Moose too, "pee poos" is a bit creepy. There, now I've rated it.~Chris King 10/10
 — FrChris

Thanks Chris, but the trouble is my poem still only has two tens. Have you been telling porky pies?
 — unknown

love your poems. can't wait to read more.
 — hank

very light and cute. i love the last to lines. nice job. i dont celebrate x-mas so the meaning may be a little lost with me, but i think i get the general idea.
 — SweetPain

Thanks, folks, and Merry Xmas to All.
 — unknown

LOL Great Poem and so true.Santa told me when i was having a schnapps with him in the Reindeer Arms that they always retouch Rudolphs nose each Xmas

From a true believer

Larry Lapland Lark
 — larrylark

Thanks, Larry. It's people like you that make people like me like people like you. BTW, did you get  bullshit warmers again for Xmax?
 — unknown

pee poos..haha
 — mr_e

Wow again

Just imagine if we had two Christmases one in June And the other in January which is such a miserable month anyhow.No,it wouldn't work,you can't get the staff these days.

Larry Barbie beach xmas Lark
 — larrylark

Merry Christmas, K!
 — unknown

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