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i like you here me
gnormal

i like
 1
you here
 2
me
 3

7 Feb 02

Rated 6 (6.9) by 4 users.
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Too itsy bitsy teeny weeny for me gnorm, though not without merit.
 — unknown

nice.
 — unknown

rated way too low.
 — unknown

i don't get it.
 — done

interesting
 — NO

and suddenly, i get it.
took me long enough.
 — unknown

hey me too.
 — done

i like
 — xsadxstarx

it's so cute! there's so much in so little.
 — abby

eecummingish
would
not you
say
 — unknown

William Carlos Williams would be proud! But I wouldn't if I wrote this. Personally it lacks content unless it's skewed way out of proportion which interpreters often do. Clever though, how every last letter of the line is the letter "e." Probably done unintentionally though. It's just I try to look for a little good in all poems and that's all I could find nice about it. Despite the fact that I personally didn't like the poem, I gave it a 10 out of 10 as I've done with every poem I've rated so far.

This message was by Chris King, age 17, New York
 — FrChris

concept u all
 — clodclod

..i don't get it...
 — unknown

gnormal...can you please explain what this means? i am nothing short of lost.
 — imissyou

i like you in this place.
i like you because you hear me.
i like you because you are here.
i like you to be here.  love, me.
i, like you, am here.
i like it when you bring me to you by reading this.
i like you.  do you hear me?
i like you.  bring me to you.
i am liking you by way of this opportunity.
i like you.  here, you can have this.  from me.
i like you so near me you hear me.
i like you so near me you are at me.
i like you.  i give myself to you.
i like things.  i have made this.  you are here now.  as much as you are here, i was too, as i have obviously left a note for you.  and in a way, i am still here. we are here together.  and i like you.
 — gnormal

?
 — unknown

THIS IS SO DUMB! anyone can write this in 1 second
 — unknown

ummm............................................. a little too............ little............... its like a half of a haiku........ sry just too small for me.
~~~unforgiven~~~
 — unforgiven

Lol, sorry for being stupid, but I never understood it until I read your entire explanation. Now I rather like it, but wish (maybe cos I'm simple-minded) that you would make it more.... full. Its like a skeleton, just a frame with no real substance. Sorry, just a thought.
 — nickiblitz

Well yeah, it's rather skeletal, but how can you say there's no substance when the poet him/her/self has just told you point blank what the substance is?  
 — unknown

gnormal,
I love this. It is amazing that it can be interpreted so many different ways. i wouldn't be suprised if everyone that ever said "I get it!" after reading your poems walked away with a different interpretation in their minds. bravo!
 — peanut

This is obviously stupid.. It does not make sense at all, but apparently there exist a group of people here that are loyal and faithful to each other. Will rate a high rating no matter how stupid the piece is, and will glorify the poem. To everything else they are all saying "cliche-cliche-cliche"  Jesus people wake up!
This web site has hit an all time low, and we are not helping by praising idiotic things like this one.
 — unknown

it says so much so simply
 — thirdeyris

?
 — unknown

it is rather short...but I like it
 — Adrielle

I think its great because you can interpret it anyway you want depending on how you feel. That way you can read this poem over a hundred times and still apreciate it... nice work 10
 — freddy

what the hell is this?
 — orange

I dont
like your
"poem"
 — unknown

here
i like me
you

just playing
 — unknown

It's very short but yet very cute!!!
 — unknown

that is so cute! i enjoyed its simplicity when i first read it, but after i read the whole shpeal you had below i couldn't help but smile. i like!
 — grace

YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE
you bring a smile on my face. =D
 — cuishanying

what the heck? what do some of yous mean "it's cute?" sorry not a fan of this particular piece. let's see... I don't want to leave without giving a little concrit.. umm... I just don't understand it. I know there's some sort of explantion in the comments but I mean.. really who would understand that without that? I think you should elaborate more, if not in the piece itself, put something as an introduction or footnote.
 — asianpearl

don't like
 — Ara

i like
your poem here
me
 — thirdeyris

everybody who says this poem is too short or didnt take any effort, well who else do u see out there writing poems similar to this? i think because of it brevity and originality it deserves a high rating. Honestly, who among you all would have thought up something so beautiful in its simplicity?
I really like this poem, but i think you should change the title, because i dunno, its like giving the secret away before you get the poem. it just feels wrong to me, i dunno. i have no idea what else you could call it though. you could ironically call it something really long. . . i dunno, i'm just babbling! lol
 — Lillythepoo

thanks lil.  that's all i ever wanted.  i see your point about the title.  my thought is that it tells you almost immediately that there is something beyond the immediate, the five words.  if it were called anything else, it might get tossed away too quickly, in 3 seconds.  maybe a few more people found a way to enjoy it, who otherwise wouldnt, because they had to think i tiny bit harder.  anyway, it feels like it's too late to change!
 — gnormal

=)
 — unknown

this is so cute.  it makes me think of a little boy giving a little girl a dandelion.
 — sassybnyss

cute
 — unknown

got this on the random first page. How cool, so much word play in a small package. I like you, hear me? I like you here over me. Nice.
 — ka

it is stuipid
 — unknown

no, this is good
 — kaleidazcope

HEAR ME I LIKE YOU

I LIKE YOU HERE. -ME
 — noodleman

This is just smartass twaddle.
 — unknown

everyone's arse smarts when it's smacked.

kaleidazcope
 — unknown

by the way i agree with changing the title. i have no suggestions however

kaleidazcope
 — unknown

the title gives it all away. perhaps a change is needed.

i love this poem, however.
 — Lia

I would like it better if it were a haiku.
 — megabyte

I don't see the point of writing the poem out again when it is just the title. Either change the title or live forever in shame because a good poem will be marked badly because of this mistake.
 — unknown

it didnt seem worth it to live forever in shame.
 — gnormal

Lazy non poem
 — larrylark

nope.
see, this is what i get for changing the title...
 — gnormal

it is
sweet like
oui
 — Meep

Yes, the title somehow fits…
 — winter

I think you are a poet who has such stature that you can say whatever that hell you want and not give a shit what anyone thinks, and pull it off. IMHO>
 — winter

?
 — Roz

if i could ever do that, this would have been one of my early ones (posted 3 julys ago).  if it hadnt gone over well, i would not have written the rest.  i still remember feeling the relief that some people enjoyed what enjoyed in there.  i thought i had nothing, or something that had no place.  thanks to you guys, i found out it was a poem.
 — unknown

It's nice.
 — DeathShards

i forgot. what was the old title?
 — hank

i love this poem and it is one of my favorites and i think that any of the chinwagging going on on the message board about classicism, format, time, ancients etc. etc. and that if you don't cooperate, subjugate to one or the other, follow the rules or use the crutches that it ain't poetry should come over and read this and gnormals explanation and then realize that poetry has to exist in the artists time. this is no sunday drive. this is not a game. it's easy to meet challenges. hard to write a good poem. (sometimes).

in fact: i'm going to post it. sorry gnorm.
 — hank

please explain the title
 — topop

It's the essence of good will and good poetry- such a whimsy.
G, it's grand!
 — netskyIam

this is good.
 — aerol

short and sweet
 — linushh

and the title says it all
 — linushh

a tarzan love poem
 — unknown

Would somebody please explain this to me?  I know one is not supposed to ask for clarification with a poem, but I don't get it.  
 — unknown

it's not true.  anyone may ask for clarification.  beware the creator who gives none.

"gnormal...can you please explain what this means? i am nothing short of lost.
— imissyou

i like you in this place.
i like you because you hear me.
i like you because you are here.
i like you to be here.  love, me.
i, like you, am here.
i like it when you bring me to you by reading this.
i like you.  do you hear me?
i like you.  bring me to you.
i am liking you by way of this opportunity.
i like you.  here, you can have this.  from me.
i like you so near me you hear me.
i like you so near me you are at me.
i like you.  i give myself to you.
i like things.  i have made this.  you are here now.  as much as you are here, i was too, as i have obviously left a note for you.  and in a way, i am still here. we are here together.  and i like you.
— gnormal"
 — gnormal

To me, the line breaks seem arbitrary unless one of the meanings is to be privileged over all the others. The title, since it has no breaks, tends to be more fabvorable to the variety of meanings you intend.

(If it helps any, the meaning that the line breaks suggest--to me--is as follows: "I like [something known only to the author and reciever of the poem], you hear[?] [signed] me")

I realize that you may have chosen those line breaks precisely because they disrupt the traditional meaning, but having no breaks at all would seem more versatile if your intention is not to emphasize the meaning above.

Otherwise, this is a rather interesting postmodern poem for the diversity of interpretation it allows. I'm not sure whether it deserves a ten or something lower, but I'm not going to rate this because of a natural predilection against postmodern poems that I have.
 — phyridean

cute =]
 — SojT

It's not a skeleton of a poem.

It's the heart of one.
 — povertea

Awesome poem, you rock
 — unknown

crap.
 — unknown

ok    good
 — unknown

I tried, still nothing.
 — unknown

i hate
you there
him

it seems the worse the poem, the more comments it receives
 — unknown

i heard
thank you
 — unknown

INTRANCE | 8'SIT
fractalcore

i am
me am
i we


written 06/01/08
thanks, gnormal.
: )
 — fractalcore

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