| fortitude spoken here
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amy
| unturned I | 1 |
until this shadow lifted | 2 |
placed me too high | 3 |
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as yet unreachable | 4 |
the devil curses retreat | 5 |
and my long blinks left dry | 6 |
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I've stretched out | 7 |
expanded this breath, filled | 8 |
my chest to full with warm | 9 |
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the weight of full less burdensome | 10 |
than the empty it has | 11 |
replaced | 12 |
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no need to wait | 13 |
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a quick one for wendz |
24 Nov 04 |
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L10--"burdensome"?
amy..I have no idea how you managed to write this year of mine into thirteen lines. I have no idea where you got all this from..but thank you..I really appreciate it.
— wendz
i'd like to linger in bars with line 1 and tell it how nice it feels when it runs it's fingers along my back. mmm.
in 6 emotion is sometimes dry and you wonder what the fuck is the point of having an emotion if you can't really feel it. or express it. take medecine probably. from a brown bottle with a screw cap, that is kept under the sink in a yellow paper bag that used to be brown. or something like that. nice line.
burdensome might be spelt like bosomsome somewhere
it's feelsome writing.
— kaleidazcope
I really love this poem. But the title is throwing me. ll10-12 are brilliant.
— Greg
The weight
of full
less
&n bsp; burdensome
than
&n bsp; the empty
it has replaced.
That's good stuff, Amy.
— Greg
I don't know what the html is doing there. I RUINED IT NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!! Ok, stopping now.
— Greg
nummy words.
mmmph!
— noodleman
I re-read this today, and it means even more to me now, looking back at 2004 than it did even back then...it's still a beautiful poem.
— wendz
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