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testimonial for a change in seasons
spaces

a clockwork girl has
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halted to wait for spring.
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observe her sillhouette --
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a stillness born of
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iron & dead things.
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her silence is immense
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and seems to hold all
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queries of futility:
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reflected in empty eyes
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our in/humanity --
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the great & grotesque
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cogs of deceit & greed,
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monuments to that
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steel which rots
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green & growing souls.
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an insurmountable presence;
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eternal vigil for the sins of man.
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but there --
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curling stubbornly
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'twixt metallic thighs
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-- is the twisting shadow
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of a fecund vine.
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29 Nov 04

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>eye twitches< This is somehow disturbing, but I can't tell you how. I really like the 5th stanza best.
 — silentscream

*wow*
this is beautiful, and i'd like to know more about the subject from whence it's drawn ... at times i saw Kali ... others, Gaia ...

Goddess poetry?

in any case ... absolutely lovely ... wouldn't change a word
 — Bloodfetish

I like this, but the imagery takes me to a place I don't like. That is a good thing, though.
 — hemothymia
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