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Quixotic
dmartin

Cotton clouds, a marshmallow for your head,
 1
intertwined in an illustrious love.
 2
Sun never rising half past the distance,
 3
the sky to remain a pink canvas haze.
 4
Bathwater running a silent waterfall,
 5
four dozen rose petals were dancing lilly pads.
 6
Living life here for an eternity,
 7
buried hand in hand with such a view.
 8

5 Dec 04

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i liked the visuals with this, but ur verb tense totally became a train wreck at line 3.  i believe you would like past tense there.
 — sassybnyss

Bathwater and roses decent imagery. Not sure if "illustrious" is the word you want to use, despite the nice sound it makes with "intertwined" and "love." Look up the definition and see if it meshes...

Also, what is intertwined with what? I can't tell. I also don't know what you mean by "half past the distance." Not that one has to know everything, but are these helpful confusions?
 — eajohnson1

I think I fixed the verb tense in L3....
 — dmartin

softly emotional
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