Comments:
"I am not really sure what you are trying to achieve here what ever it is it fails miserably."
morch, you obviously have some valuable and specific things to say. i would rather get a review from you than so many who say, "fucking rocks!"
but come on, if you dont know understand what the author is going for, you should shut up and think about it some more, or just pass.
i suggest you review poems you like, or want to like. then you can improve the writer instead of discouraging someone more daring than yourself.
i am not the author.
— unknown
I congratulate the unknown for pointing out the fatal flaw of Morchuis' comment, which was the problem of trying to make suggestions for improvements but clearly not understanding the poem. Where I would reprimand the unknown, however, lies in the manner of commenting, as the unknown was possibly a little harsh and rough sounding, and might come off as offensive.
Well, Morchuis. Your comments seem to be well-worded, but I don't think you understand the nature of poetry from what I have seen of your comments on poetry on this site as of late. I also do not think you understand the nature of this site.
Your recommendation of the renaming of this site was a rude joke that I find very offensive.
I'm not sure why you're trying to get me to repeat "grim" twice in your suggestion for my second stanza.
Also, if you yourself agree that you are unsure as to what I am trying to achieve, I am not quite sure why you are recommending changes.
Nonetheless, I do appreciate your eloquent phrasing and the time you have taken to comment, but the intent behind those words does not seem to serve an appropriate purpose.
— Inuki
"of the renaming of this site"
I mean "renaming of this poem" rather, of course.
— Inuki
Morchuis,
It seems pretty arrogant
to admit that you do not understand
the meaning or the significance of the poetry,
and then openly critic size
it just on the basis of that
(i.e. plight of poetry).
But on to the poem itself,
the first stanza is my favorite.
It reads as the most genuine and sincere,
compared to the other stanzas, which read
as slightly forced.
I'm not exactly sure if I like the repetition
found throughout here. I don't
really understand it, but I cannot
so soon decide I dislike it just because
of that, though.
The last stanza, however, doesn’t
do much for me. It doesn’t resolve
anything, but is that what you were
going for? I’m not so sure.
If you may,
just explain some of these things to me
and I will come back and reread this
and form a better opinion.
— Rixes
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