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daft maneuvers
psychedelico

there are daggers in my earholes.
 1
   the first earholes, if you count from
 2
     the inside out, like i do.
 3
   eat wine and drink bread, like i do.
 4
   love your god with an iron pyrite
 5
     heart, like i do.
 6
 
 
and he's my mophead,
 7
we lay on floors together
 8
with limbs locked in Saran wrap.
 9
my secret boyfriend
 10
who's bad at stealing discreet kisses,
 11
he wants to drop acid
 12
on New Year's.
 13
 
 
there are daggers in his eyes.
 14
   the left eyes, if you count them
 15
     in a column, like i do.
 16
   stare blankly and cry quietly, like i do.
 17
   love your lover with a stale
 18
     reservoir of good will, like i do.
 19
 
 
and the wind steers aptly
 20
through tunneled alleys,
 21
never masking the indomitable
 22
stench of swine.
 23
we pay good money
 24
to be this cold and hungry
 25
on amulet holidays.
 26

28 Dec 04


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feedback... PLEASE.

this is purgatory.
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I don't get it..
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I like some of it... I like the bits about counting and collumns and stuff... The repitition.
I dislike the last bit.


-adorablelittlepenis
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oh wow

blimey

i can oidentify wid dis, inconsolably

this man oi wuv is into sewan wrap. i really wannted to blowe his cock. lick it really. like a lolli. and then swallow all his semens. he was gonna visit me. but then he blowed me off instead.

now i'm stuck with 100 wolls of organic seran wrap. yes. i am nature freaky.
and a crop of corn in de fields


Loocille
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