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William and Virginia
larrylark

All is silent. The lighthouse
 1
guides us into night's port.
 2
There, we shall gently bob
 3
beyond rocky reaches, becalmed
 4
among lengthening shadows
 5
of suburban beaches.
 6
A small son crouches,
 7
peering across his knees
 8
at portraits he draws
 9
of mum and dad,
 10
'It's you' he says,
 11
'Well done' comes
 12
the reflex reply as I glance
 13
at myself – dead
 14
ringer for William,
 15
the Conqueror,
 16
complete with
 17
topiary beard, gargoyle
 18
with a faux-Norman look.
 19
Mummy is beautifully
 20
drawn; long ethereal face,
 21
lyrical goddess, anguished
 22
and torn. Virginia Woolf reborn.
 23
 
 
Paper recreations,
 24
what would they have said
 25
to each other? Lying
 26
side by side – strange,
 27
unaccustomed bedfellows,
 28
newly acquainted
 29
long-lost sister
 30
and ghostly brother.
 31
We turn out the light
 32
and all go to bed.
 33
Deep in the night
 34
comes the murmur
 35
of voices; she, reciting,
 36
he, muttering of strategies,
 37
battle-sites, the spot
 38
where his bold plan
 39
will unfold is hastily noted.
 40
 
 
 
 
The time on his clock
 41
reads 10:66.
 42
She reads aloud,
 43
her rhythmic prose,
 44
describing her characters'
 45
foibles and machinations,
 46
comings and goings
 47
at London's railway
 48
stations. He listens
 49
and marvels at
 50
the language
 51
he bequeathed.
 52
Their models sleep
 53
abed, effigies who lie
 54
as knights recumbent.
 55

A collaboration, written with my wife

4 Jan 05

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WOW...i got an inferiority complex just from reading this. usually i can dredge up some scrap of criticism, but not with this. my compliments to you sir, and your wife. this is wonderful. wish i could offer helpful insights to help you elevate your art, but this is perfect as is!
 — Catbox

wife or Larry
L1-2 wife
L3 Larry
L4-5 wife
L6 Larry
L7-10 Wife
L11-19 Larry
L20-23 Wife
L24-36 Wife
L37-40 Larry
even too bored for this now
 — unknown

hermaphrodite poetry - nice one
 — unknown

Dear Catbox

Being descended in direct line from William The Conquerer and also being on intimate terms with Virginia Woolfs pet cats niece Mimi, i can tell you that none of my Uncle Normans ancestors fought in the Battle Of Hastings but i have read To The Lighthouse and found it rather illuminating

Larry recumbant Lark
 — larrylark

Dear Unknown

I told a little lie when i said that my wife and i wrote this poem.Actually Grandma Moses who lives next door contribited L18 as she said those words reminded her of Ripper, her dear departed but not forgotten bulldog

Larry sleeping in the kennel Lark
 — larrylark

Dear Unknown

Some of the sounds emmanating from downstairs might lead one to think otherwise.

Larry  living dead Lark
 — larrylark

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