| Trees
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tragicbubble
| Empty branches reach for | 1 |
an empty heaven | 2 |
without leaves and without dreams | 3 |
they meet with never | 4 |
and I cannot promise | 5 |
you ever | 6 |
when my fingers lie crossed | 7 |
beneath empty trees. | 8 |
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11 Jan 05 |
Rated 8 (7.4) by 4 users.
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so pretty.
— noodleman
This is beautiful. I think the last two lines come off like a fragment of a new stanza though and should be worked with to find the completing poetics. (C)
— unknown
i'm adding this to my favorites.
— sassybnyss
Feels like a basket being woven, although it has nothing to do with baskets. Just a weaving of words...
— Isabelle5
I really like this Emma, ur'e really great at this stuff.....it's cheerin me up a bit onn this dispal valentines day, keep writing !! -your friend josh
— unknown
I like this alot, reminds me of laying in a sunny field for some reason.
— PaulBeers
i don't have the same happy feelings that other commenters have left -- but i do love this poem greatly
rather, i see a sadness, a holding back -- late fall, early winter, and spring so far away
my fingers, too, are crossed ... but against a promise of ever? or in hope of now?
— Bloodfetish
nice poem. It's awesome. I enjoy how you put it all so--um--noiseless. does that make sense? Your poem is good. I compliment you. (; (10)
— ducktape
pretty
— unknown
Alright. Gets better when I read it a second time.
— synej
l6.. maybe change it to forever. And then I feel like you should have your fingers crossed behind your back.. or be lying beneath empty trees. I guess because it like just your fingers and crossed beneath the trees, like it makes me picture two fingers lying on the grass beneath the trees, or like you standing with your arms above your head and your fingers crossed all together. Maybe its just me being wierd and grammatical.. think about it maybe.
— Cloudless
Beautiful,loved the cross fingered image
— larrylark
very sweet, i like it. would love you to post an opinion on something i wrote.
— photobooth
this is very good poem, so profound
— krookedsk8r
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