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— EdwardDurden
very interesting. not awesome, but interesting, especially the last 2 lines
— unknown
a sexual accident
without airbags
yourmother
— unknown
this has a nice rhythm. it seems like it should rhyme...
if you could change your thoughts,
your taste,
your mind, your life, your friends
could you change your entire existence?
-7 syllable line here that i can't think of that rhymes with friends-
should something come into your way,
should something block your view,
and you become the vicctim of circumstance,
would you change the way you ... dance? (dance is a horrible example, but again i can't think of a rhyme)
life is not a steady thing.
it reels you all about.
the slightest thing could change you mood...
no condom can keep life out.
i nearly rewrote this, so maybe it's not what you were going for anymore...
— unknown
i liked it all the way up to verse 12 then it just blew it for me
— ManaBell
Life is not a steady thing.
It reels you in and out.
Nice choice of words, contolled.
— Meep
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