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the construction worker's charm
Inuki

i admire those dusky men
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toiling away into the raw red nights
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until their skin grows thick
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like cow-hide
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and their hearts harden like the iron
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they work with.
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i admire them
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down to the sweat
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that sheens on their naked bodies at night
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groaning under the strain
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i salute their slippery wet hands
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greased with sweat and blood
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as they wipe their tired, messy brows
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rub their helmets for good luck
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and head to work
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after a long day at home.
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23 Jan 05

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I've never thought of construction workers like that.
great job!
 — imahabit

rraaaandddom, but great
 — tragicbubble

its pretty sweetass
 — unknown

It makes me think of gay porn. Seriously.
Um, not that I've ever watched it or anything.
But "groaning", "sweat", "rub", "naked bodies", "head"...
They're all gay connotations!
 — wendz

its cool but i dunno why you rote it about construction workers???
 — unknown

i like this. perfect all the way through.
 — listen
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