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Ch'own Monkey Yoga
Quichemarie

The boyz pulled us over
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for a rolling stop,
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only, the boyz was a lady
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and the barbed wire around the
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license plate obstructed her view.
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Perhaps it was an omen,
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“stop before proceeding ”,
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“look both ways before crossing ”
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“think before you speak ”,
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but my name is not Prudence.
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Only little Amish girls seem
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to have that name. I like their
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furniture, especially the bed frames
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fashioned from cedar posts,
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but I can ’t handle their hair.
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Once I thought our waiter was
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an Amish man. He had the beard,
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but his hair wasn ’t bowl-cut enough,
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and he certainly wasn ’t polite.
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I bet he didn ’t even make furniture.
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We left a small tip, just to piss him off.
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I wonder if he hissed like monkeys do
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when they get mad. Maybe he raised
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one leg and folded his arms over his head,
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making a face to scare his enemy.
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I tried that when the lady cop wrote
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out our ticket, but she only cited us
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for the rolling stop, didn ’t say
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a thing about the Monkey yoga.
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26 Jan 05

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I was SO prepared to hate this.   I made two false starts and then took a deep breath, read it all the way through and found myself laughing at your humor.

This is really quite good.  
 — Isabelle5

Can you explain the title, now?  
 — Isabelle5

haha, this is quite a humorous poem.  I'm still laughing about the Monkey Yoga and the waitor hissing about the tip! lol.  Nice.
 — ducktape

cool.
isnt it the shakers that make the furniture?
 — gnormal

I think  this is very cool.
 — Kewanee

Thanks for the comments. The title is sort of silly. Ch'own is sort of short for "Get Your Own"  It was a silly day and we were making up silly words. Anyway..I do appreciate your comments. ~Q~
 — Quichemarie

love love love
 — noodleman

this needs to be read more more more.

i said this to my dog today over and over and over and even sung it in the shower. Ch'own monkey yoga, dog! Ch'own monkey yoga, dog! Ch'own monkey yoga, dog! Chooooooooooown monkey yoga. dassiiight!

-noodleman
 — unknown

yes tis gud
 — kaleidazcope

very cool and funny!
 — frankensteen

Thank you all for the wonderful comments. Noodleman, I have fun with this phrase, too. I really appreciate your positive feedback. ~Q~
 — Quichemarie

funny, but not the best poem. Doesn't really say much profound... just throws together a bunch of situations and ties them together funnily.
 — omega

Love this. Love the way it flows and the way the thoughts all drift but tie back in. Props.
 — wendz

SO funny.  New fav.  Quid Pro Quo:  themolly has a phobic fear of the Amish.  She has tried forced contact, conversation, holding visuals, and nothing will uncondition this creepy nauseus response.  Damn Children of the Corn.
 — themolly

hazza!
 — noodleman

too much story-
not enough monkey...
 — chuckles

i love this poem very funny, i had the monkey image in my mind for some time, i hope i dream about money yoga tonight
 — timbosys

i like it
 — unknown

good poem.
 — jumpoline

hey that wasa relly stupid poem that waisted 1 min of my life i'm so sorry for reading that i wonder if i'll evr get my 1 minite of my life back :( i hope you don't read this it is really stupid so do your self a favor and leave this site now befor it's to late!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
 — unknown

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