| wet paint
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tragicbubble
| Sticky red paint | 1 |
touched | 2 |
on a wall that reads | 3 |
'Don’t' | 4 |
but since that wall is ignored | 5 |
and I do, | 6 |
I bring red hands | 7 |
back to you. | 8 |
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30 Jan 05 |
Rated 7.3 (7.8) by 5 users.
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it's so cute! *grin* i really love this. goes to show how talent can be displayed in just so few words :)
— sugaraindrop
i like this.
— shakeit
Simple, charming, and effective. I always love poems having to do with paint. Good work!
— Dead
hehe...this is something sweet. I like the poem. I like red paint. I like to be reminded of a memory. You did that. This poem is very cute indeed! Nice one. (;
— ducktape
You're very good at this! Such charming little poems you are able to write--I envy you.
— FangzOfFire
I'll put $2.00 on gnormal.
— root
I'm wrong! Well, aren't you a clever thing. That's two poems in a row where you're breaking the mould--I will have to read more by you.
— root
This is so charmingly and disarmingly effective
— larrylark
I don't think I understand what you mean here could you explain for me?
— lodza
you know those signs that say, "wet paint don't touch" and you alway want to touch them?
well its like... you're ina relationship and you cheat
red hands= guilty... get it?
— tragicbubble
Cute!
— Isabelle5
I like it. Its pretty sharp and not at all damp
— mr_e
ahhh the dawn of understanding i like it
— lodza
it's nippy, i like
— Odin
a sweet liitle piece. reminiscent of frank o'hara. j
— jitney
It makes no sense. I re-read this a few times to find something that I liked about it, and there was nothing.
— marchhare
Its missing some ooomp and the last part is a bit fey but overall a good job
— larrylark
lol fun poem i like a lot :o)
— PaulBeers
good one...
— inc_reign
sticky? is paint sticky?
I like the short "don't." Some people would say "don't touch," but don't feel just right.
The bringing of red hands seems like bringing everything you have done, including the bad, to somebody for judgment.
I like this, and I like the flow and little rhyme
— delfinkay
red handed indeed. this is a new way to put it. simplistic and original.
— SteelAngel
Hmmm... I don't know if this is too cute like everyone says, but I liked it just the same. Next time you should wear gloves or wash your hands at least.
— Poor_Poet
a breathe of resh air
— krookedsk8r
hey tb,
Just a small suggestion:
is inored or was ignored & I do? or I did?
— unknown
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