| Adultery to the Tune of Dilated Pupils (Foto Fridays)
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InMyBlood
| Polka dot pupils | 1 |
sear in serene image straight from | 2 |
cornea to cortex. | 3 |
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Hungry eyes scream | 4 |
"fingers are for frontal lobe gouging" | 5 |
skin those digits deep down | 6 |
dig out the dead gray matter. | 7 |
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Love the permanent vegetative state; | 8 |
cold ivory skin | 9 |
meshed with plaid sense of style. | 10 |
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Flounder endlessly, | 11 |
or make love to the tune of euthanasia | 12 |
while the rest of us swing to the music of adultery. | 13 |
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4 Feb 05 |
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Revolution Harry!!
— ShelbyS
really quite extroardinary, thank you for being the FIRST participant in Foto Friday.
this poem is so liquid, i really didg the flow of it all lines 4 thru 7 are loke a big hot steaming bowl of chunky joy!
you have the most beautiful shoes in puppetland
— onklcrispy
"fingers are for frontal lobe gouging" 5
skin those digits deep down 6
mmm
— kaleidazcope
Wonderfully Nauseating.
— unknown
Thank you.
— InMyBlood
This rocks... It reminds me of one I wrote called "adultery in the key of c" or something like that.
Look it up on my poem list--it's pretty good and a lot like this one.
However, yours is MUCH more descriptive.
— aforbing
hey that's excellent. nice images.
only suggestion: put a semicolon at the end of |8, then drop the "with" at the beginning of |9.
that should clean up the flow and it avoids the repetition of "with."
nice poem.
— mould_jesus
now that i think about it... that last stanza reminds me of a clann zu song.
"and all of the people are gathered around to listen to the beautiful sounds coming out of the bodies swinging in the coolest breeze; nodding in time to the sweet serenade."
you can download the song here
— mould_jesus
Maybe I will
— InMyBlood
really liked this, particularly the last three lines.
one thing though, and sorry for asking, but what is the whole "Foto Fridays" thing?
— duffyj83
Thank you, and refer to the message board and look around a bit. Its a kind of contest but really not. You look at the posted picture and write a poem from it. This was for foto friday number 1.
— InMyBlood
the words are magical
love the illiteration
polka dots!
ever seen polka squares
painted on a the ass of a matador?
...i'm sorry everyone
— Vonnegutman
Lets see you dance sucka you got nottin on me
— InMyBlood
i like.
— unknown
Thanks.
— InMyBlood
must go find the photo that inspired this.. great ending
— oracle
ask uncle crispy
— InMyBlood
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