| this, my confusion
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tragicbubble
| read the columns after reading the whole poem straight through, they make another poem
| I don't | 1 |
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want | 2 |
you to touch me | 3 |
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because you'll hurt me | 4 |
don't you want to, | 5 |
just | 6 |
stop to | 7 |
breathe | 8 |
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you really trust me | 9 |
want me and | 10 |
love me so endlessly you | 11 |
tell me this is love | 12 |
and then I'll believe in | 13 |
you and me everlasting | 14 |
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Forever | 15 |
is closer | 16 |
than never. | 17 |
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13 Feb 05 |
Rated 7.5 (7.8) by 4 users.
Active (4): 7, 8
Inactive (6): 4, 5, 8, 8, 8, 9, 9, 10
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Comments:
Very clever little thing you have going on there!
— FangzOfFire
it would be cool if you could format the title the same way, and do this with three or more columns. this is creative, but that would take talent.
— root
it is rare that a writer manages to pull off this type of poem so well ... the visual is stunning
— Bloodfetish
Well Emma, they dont rate this one as high as ur others, but it's a great poem good title to, reminds me of a Radiohead song title.....but yea....i'm so moody right now...lol, ur poems are beautiful ...keep writinnng - ur budday josh
— unknown
Why are you so talented? lol this is awesome
— Delicatelie
Cool. Very cool.
— poppinjay
I love it, very witty and at the same time, not just witty - beautiful too.
:-)
maria
— slancho
that IS very clever. and i like both versions.
— Dom
I agree with everyone, very clever. Good.
— sam
I like the idea, and its done really well
I like column 2 on its own.
— silly
interesting.thats all i got to say about this poem.interesting
— bloodstained
Nice, but I'm looking for more.
— boromir4121
Awsome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
— horolaggia
You have too much time or too much talent and i know you so its know it the latter
— krookedsk8r
i like! nice job
— unknown
the line breaks are cool
but the wording is lacking.
— unknown
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