| The Price of First Sight
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innominate
| A blind man opens | 1 |
his heart and sees her shining; | 2 |
denied, he winces. | 3 |
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16 Feb 05 |
Rated 5.3 (7.6) by 5 users.
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Beutiful.
— SweetxMemory
So simple and yet I keep reading it over and over. I agree, beautiful.
— CantTell
thanks to both of ya
— innominate
oh brillant, oh my, really, love, love love this.
just
awesome
— tragicbubble
I'm usually not for short pieces,
But I had to read this a few times before I decided to give it a ten
Good work.
— lieskilllies
good senryu
-Rixes
— unknown
wow
— Lillythepoo
Wow, man! 13 words so little, yet so powerful!
— deepcover
one of the only poems like this that I like :)
— unknown
No way!
— unknown
Simplicity in its best form. Thanks
— Blakie490
One of the best haikus i've ever had the pleasure of reading.
— unknown
Very Daredevil
— unknown
positively lovely.
— meth_angel
Great
— orange
amazing<3
— LoserXcore
Boring.
— synej
sweet. very well done.
— lillas
wow thatsucked
— unknown
wow that sucked
— unknown
I really like this poem, you have goals I can tell.
— unknown
pretty.
— aeturnus
confusing
— unknown
ouch
— Cloudless
Very good. Most people have difficulty with haikus, but you have embraced it beautifully.
— blankpages
I like this but I wonder if the title would be stronger as The Price of Second Sight, because he has to imagine her, not see visually but with the other kind of sight.
Just a thought. Nice haiku.
— Isabelle5
nice poem.
— hank
nice
— unknown
ah, beautiful random. Still good, still small and nearly perfect.
— Isabelle5
I am new to this site and keep clicking on poems that I have no critique for. This is a perfect, if bittersweet haiku, I like!
— angrychick
I love getting compliments for something I did two years ago. This site rocks! Thanks for the kudos, peeps.
— innominate
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