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Life in the Chute

Strolling through the parks	1
While chewing on some maze,	2
Feeling the ultimate of inner peace	3
As I down some cranberry juice	4
and mosh to pulsed, electrified metal.	5

Finding pearls of faith and truth,	6
Forever clear that the pumpkins won't last through the summer rains.	7
Its a twisted stairway to the highway to hell.	8
Climb into a yellow submarine with my generation	9
'Cause it's the end of the world as we know it.	10

But as we feel our vessel surfacing,	11
Allowing us to see a corrupted world,	12
We open the torpedo chute	13
and slide in some new batteries.	14

My tribute to life seen from the eyes of my CD player. It's easier to understand the second time you read it. Think you can find all 14 bands mentioned? If you give up, look at my comment for the answers.

21 Feb 05

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The Cranberries, The Smashing Pumpkins, Beatles, ACDC, Led Zeppelin( ha ive always made that comparison), The Who, R.E.M, maybe Pink Floyd, Do you know who PJ Harvery is? Ok. I give up. Thats 7 for sure bands. ha. I feel accomplished.
— stellarskys6

it took me a moment to catch on, but then it was VERY clever. great job, especially footnoting it rather than an intro... the middle stanza was the best.
— Dom

Thanks for to comments fellas. You guys wanna know all the bands in there or should i give you one more day?
— EdwardDurden

Clever, though if a little jumbled and indistinctly told.
— FangzOfFire

The hidden band relations are:
1)Linkin p\Park
2)Korn
3)Nirvana
4)Cranberries
5)Metal lica
6) Pearl Jam
7) Everclear, Smashing Pumpkins and Guns N Roses
8) Led Zepplin and ACDC
9)The Beatles and The Who
10)R.E.M.
— EdwardDurden

That first one is Linkin *Park*
— EdwardDurden

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— EdwardDurden

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