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Routine
EdwardDurden

Nareg, did you turn in your college papers?
 1
Yes.
 2
                               You know you have to turn in your college papers to enjoy your life.
 3
                       Yes.
 4
   Nareg, did you eat breakfast?
 5
             Yes.
 6
You know you have to eat breakfast to have a fruitful day.
 7
                                                          Yes.
 8
                                    Nareg, did you wash your face?
 9
                                            Yes.
 10
                      You know you have to wash your face to look your best.
 11
                                                      Yes.
 12
Nareg, are you ready? Your ride is coming.
 13
                             Yes.
 14
                                                          You know you have to be ready for your ride to be respectable.
 15
             Yes.
 16
                                                           Yes.
 17
                                     Yes.
 18
                                                Yes.
 19
                 Yes.
 20
Nareg?
 21
Yes.
 22
Nareg?
 23
Yes.
 24
Nareg, are you listening?
 25
Yes.
 26
Nareg, did you turn in your college papers?
 27

22 Feb 05


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Fun use of internal rhyme here, "wash/face/best," love the tie-in to "breakfast," then the quick alliteration in lines 13-15.  But do drop the footnote.
 — mikkirat

i like this .. especially the set-up for the buckshot of "yes" in lines 16-20
 — Bloodfetish

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 — EdwardDurden

This is one classy, controlled poem.
 — unknown
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