| Getting On to Get Off
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Isabelle5
| Seductive and secure, | 1 |
she holds me down | 2 |
by the wrists, | 3 |
sometimes joining | 4 |
fingers, | 5 |
sometimes paralyzing me | 6 |
with something | 7 |
she’s doing | 8 |
with | 9 |
teeth and tongue, | 10 |
preventing me | 11 |
from helping | 12 |
with my hands. | 13 |
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Agony | 14 |
of a new kind, | 15 |
part of me wishing, | 16 |
part of me urging, | 17 |
all of me waiting | 18 |
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until she | 19 |
sits back on her heels, | 20 |
sly look | 21 |
of satisfaction | 22 |
on her face. | 23 |
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My turn | 24 |
to restrain | 25 |
this arrogant | 26 |
enticing | 27 |
woman | 28 |
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and hear | 29 |
her own | 30 |
undoing. | 31 |
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Doing, undoing, | 32 |
getting on | 33 |
to get off. | 34 |
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25 Feb 05 |
Rated 7.7 (7.7) by 8 users.
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There now. A woman after my own heart. Terrific!!
Sam
— unknown
delicious exploration into bdsm ... i especially like the tight, restrained writing ... while the poem flows, the lines are clearly knots. tasty!
— Bloodfetish
Excellent poem I must say. Your words flow nicely and it really makes you explore and make your mind linger. I really enjoyed your poem
— Cassie
tie me up, tie me down, baby!
— aforbing
sick
— unknown
Excellent. By and large, easy, clear and convincing. I'd only wonder of "arrogant/enticing" might not feel to judgemental/editorial. I think both elements are already evident in the poem. And, of course, I fell for the seduction, so bonus points are awarded.
— mikkirat
You can almost hear the spanks in lines 24-31. I love it! I love how "arrogant" is no longer necessarily a negative; rather it's a turn-on. Awesome!
— unknown
niiiiiice
— unknown
Could put an image in my mind. How can I write like that?
— jusmat
I want more like this one Isabelle 5!
— CantTell
Great poem, have u been in New Zealand lately
— unknown
what the hell is that comment about?
— unknown
Hey, what's in New Zealand? I'm up for a lot lately, obviously...hahahaha
— Isabelle5
ilike
— unknown
impressive, seductive.
— Kewanee
U HATE MEN obviously.
— unknown
Who hates men? Not this poet! I think men are God's best gift to the Universe. I'm personally crazy about men!
— Isabelle5
They obviously don't get it, Isabelle. I don't get how you couldn't understand it, but hey...
— CantTell
bad
— unknown
i get it ... and still find it delicious ....
— Bloodfetish
mmm.. seductive.
— Cloudless
hot!!!hot!!! i love your poem
— unknown
now with this poem everyone can use their imagination! Nice
— unknown
yes.
— themolly
You dirty bitch
(i'm available on weekends)
— mr_e
WOW! I can taste this poem . . .
— slancho
The power of the last line is compromised by the fact that it's the title of the poem. Other than that, just great. I agree with unknown: "Arrogant" shocks at first and then you see it's meant to be a marvelous trait. Glad to hear you've been having fun.
— ollylama
This has the ring of fakery about it. Reads like the writeris trying to play a clever trick on the reader,written by someone with a not too fertile imagination who has gone for what is the obvious. It would be great on a website for phony poems ,one should be started because theres enough of them around.Next time try writing real.
— unknown
phony poems? what's that about?
— unknown
You might want to ask my boyfriend if it was real or not....*.^
— Isabelle5
I did. His eyes rolled back, his body went limp...and he smiled...oh, did he smile;)
— unknown
Very good.
— cowork
To quote the terrible McDonalds commercials. I'm lovin' it.
— slimsoap
Random! Now I'm hot and sweaty.
— unknown
the flow is wonderful, I like the short lines. 24-31 are really great lines.
— imahabit
Random poem? Nothing random here!
— unknown
Loved this! Of course had to check out your stuff for being so sweet and commenting on my crap! Pay it forward, right? This is a sexy tight little poem! LOVE L24-31 epecially!
=)
— warsager
this is quite sexy
i have no suggestions for
this one, just kudos.
— megabyte
How terrifically interesting Yawn Yawn
— larrylark
Someone is writing about playing Twister again.
— unknown
we have the same taste
— unknown
this sucked. like a bad lay, with a fake orgasm thrown in for good, premeditated measure. blah
— unknown
Last unknown comment, not very helpful. I can see why you know so much about bad lays and faked orgasms, if this is how helpful you are with poetry!
In my poems, women on fake it if they want to, not because they need to. Sorry about YOUR fantasies! lol
— Isabelle5
Loved.
Lines 14-18 seem a bit weaker to me.
This is stunning. Damn you Isabelle. Now I'm horny. Well done :D
— WordsAndMe
Delicious
— haykulu
I like this poem. This is not meant as a crass comment, but I got physically aroused reading it, which means it must be good.
— unknown
I like this very much esp. line 24-29. Wow.
— opal
Agree with the lovely and talented opal. Lines 24-29 are perfect.
— unknown
wow. for being such a "sure of himself" critic, maybs you could use a little bit of help for this poem first. just a suggestion...
— dustybottoms
What help did you have in mind, dustybottoms? I am sure of nothing but how to punctuate. I must have left a comment on one of your poems, that's what I'm thinking.
— Isabelle5
Okay, I see, I didn't like your very first poem posted. I read it again and still don't get it, sorry. But that's NOT a reason to leave a comment like this on a poem.
— Isabelle5
feeling hot hot hot! sexy isabelle :)
— bohemian
oh my you wrote this on my birthday. any ways this poem was great
— unknown
This is a raunchy 'random' poem! Straight into my favs!
— JustineCH
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