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blackie
hank

blackie the cat belongs to my friendly
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yes, he is.
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one day he got bit by blackie
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but it was only once
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(or so he says) blackie
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never bit me and
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purrs
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when i hold him
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and when we go get drunk at the house
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he runs outside.
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blackie is a good one.
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27 Feb 05

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well this blew my tiny mind
it reads like treacle and the meaning  is satisfyingly sticky.  i likey it.
 — kaleidazcope

wish i knew how to write like this

root
 — unknown

This seems more like a puzzle than a poem.
 — unknown

I can't say I know why this is such a big deal.
 — FangzOfFire

it's no puzzle to seem.
 — hank

It sounds like Lennie from "Of Mice and Men".
 — CantTell

i like the pivot words ... nicely done
 — Bloodfetish

interesting, but not quite great. it's like on of those pieces of visual art where somebody splatters paint in one place on a white canvas and calls it meaningful. it's abstract, but not necessarily art. abstraction is good when it carries some sort of artistic merit.

this is just pure abstraction and not a whole lot of poetry.
 — mould_jesus

what is so abstract? it's actually quite literal, literally a description of a cat.
 — hank

i love this.
 — listen

my cat's name is blackie
-madderhatter
 — unknown

Says a lot seemingly without saying anything at all.
 — larrylark

thank you larry, it's a difficult game that i can't always play. but i try.
 — hank

He died
last week
they kept him for me
Had a smile
that maded me giggle

17 years
Dug an put him under the apple tree.
 — unknown

bye bye blackie.
 — hank

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