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Amazon Women
ollylama

Amazon women cut off their breast
 1
That they might pull the bow the best
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And slay the rogues, before whom, undressed,
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They'd likely languished unmolest.
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“There’s no treasure here, her chest is spare”
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Hirsute barbarian soon declares,
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Then, shot right through, his heart too, laid bare
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Learns to rue the sex more fair.
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A laying down of arms might have repaired
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This wound that cleaves from him to her.
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Now quiet and sweet, his constant stare
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Beguiles her fingers through his hair.
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Taken from my novel Abyssinia. Available for free download from www.oliverbenjamin.net/abys.html

12 Mar 05

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a lesson learned. something i will keep in my as i go to the slaughter (once again). thank you llama.
 — hank

...keep in my (mind) as i go...
 — hank

great poem. good subject, good rhyme, good use of words. i can't think of anything to suggest to make it better.
 — Lia

this is just
bloody
awesome!
awesomes
 — chuckles

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