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beast space
spaces

to curl inside
 1
this capsule of
 2
sharp undirected
 3
and undiluted walls
 4
  -- undo me back
 5
to that space you create:
 6
  a place to keep me,
 7
  and comfortable
 8
     anarchies of the soul.
 9
 
 
i'm tired.
 10
 
 
your hands trying
 11
not to touch me
 12
and these scenes
 13
that turn to white:
 14
like an expanding
 15
  burning hole,
 16
a cherry set deep inside
 17
  a half-developed polaroid.
 18

21 Mar 05

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This is a good work that just needs some attention paid to some early lines(specifically lines 3 and 4) that rely on descriptives and aren't nearly as strong as the remainder. On the whole, I enjoyed this peek into the workings. Looking back without much comfort...well done.
 — ka
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