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Isn't It All Cliche'?
dmartin

A secret spot the whole world knows of,
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we go there often.
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There upon the edge of a cornfield,
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with a steel tower to cast shadows from the moon...
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Intimate and deep in the gallows of blue eyes,
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I found the other half of my heart.
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And so far into love,
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holding hands becomes a formality.
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And again does combining bodies,
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efforts soon become a struggle...
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I myself fall into the canyons of your soul,
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lost, waiting for a search party that isn't coming.
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Getting back together is the remix of
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a song already bad to begin with.
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But in most cases,
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Its a casualty that can't be avoided...
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Soon come an exchange of words at excessive volume,
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Soon come the tears that never stop coming.
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It happens a second time,
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maybe even a third and a fourth.
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Often never ending for one of us,
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until there is no other alternative...
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Forever awkward in our hearts, misplaced affection,
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always the in-flight movie.
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Maybe love is the one that is cliché.
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6 Apr 05

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  I like the care you used.  Lampoon and humor is not easy. This time it's done in an gentle, easy fashion.  Reads just fine.  I wish you'd ditch the spoiler title "isn't it all cliche'?" is all.   I -think- the better readers will still get the theme. thanks for a good poem.
 — netskyIam

good stuff... change the title
 — green_book

I too think the title needs to be changed, but to what?
 — dmartin

love is a wonderful cliche. i liked this, very refreshing to read.
 — SweetPain

i dell you

do not say dis!

gupta
 — unknown

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