| Where Time and Space End
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Hadron
| Light on a summer night, chased by a child | 1 |
whose hand reaches out--captures the light, | 2 |
opens her hand; the glowfly blinks, | 3 |
then flies away. | 4 |
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On a distant planet, | 5 |
a being scans the evening sky, | 6 |
sees the point of light on its journey | 7 |
to a place where time and space end. | 8 |
Where the child has been | 9 |
long before the spark is seen-- | 10 |
holding eternity in her empty hand. | 11 |
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25 Feb 03 |
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This is beautiful. The only thing I would say is that "Far in the future" in combination with "long before the spark is seen" is a bit redundant. You know? It's almost as if you're trusting or assuming that the reader won't get it the first time.
— Ananke
Anake,
you're point is wll taken and I have edited to eliminate
the redundancy. Tkank you, it reads much better IMO.
— Hadron
This is fairly interesting, though at risk of sounding trite. Line 11, in particular, is bordering on cheesy. Good poem though.
— Moose
A delightfully quiet moment suspended as if in amber. I like the last line, it embraces the poem's serenity gently.
— Duende
I am not sure why I love this poem so.
I think it's the idea that we are never truly alone in our thoughts.
Right now, someone feels just the way we do, or don't.
It's both comforting
and lonesome.
I love this.
— LauraLea
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