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thirdeyris
| When teaching a child | 1 |
be careful not to say.. | 2 |
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it's dirty. | 3 |
or it's a no-no | 4 |
or it's private, stay out of it. | 5 |
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Remember not to tell her | 6 |
it's disgusting | 7 |
and it's meant for | 8 |
someone else one day. | 9 |
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Be careful | 10 |
because | 11 |
she might believe everything you say. | 12 |
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11 Apr 05 |
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thhis is really powerful. and with very little words - perhaps like this comment
— guelah
yea i guess it is a good peom but with is up with guelah and "this is really powerful "
-lAsTlIe
— unknown
OOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!! I LIKE! A complete success.
— EdwardDurden
beautiful. perfect.
— unknown
This is great!
I love 6--9.
I would maybe tighten up 10-12,
into one line---->
dash- after 'day'
drop- 'Be careful because'----
eh,
but that could just be me. :-)
Very nice.
— Krttika
Oh--
and I dig the title too.
— Krttika
i have never heard this voice or advice before in my life,
but i hear it happens.
— kaleidazcope
Love it! It gave me chills (that's what happens when something resonates true with me).
— SoulOne
oh my goddess i love this poem!!! i never thought of this idea...very clever!
— woman_power
This is SO perfect. You should write a parenting manual.
— themolly
good poem...its pretty interesting actually
— lulubee
Powerful.
— mixtapeboy
this poem is so very true. i like it. :)
— missmurder
well said , a good description of the effect we have on our blank sheets we call children.
nice job.
— SweetPain
glorious... how fantastically and deeply moving...i love... :)
— GreenDreams
line 12 excellent ending
— my_adonis
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