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"haggard" originally denoted a wild falcon trapped for training
netskyIam

-a verse built around and for the word, haggard-
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a grave and gaunt-faced falconer
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relents a haggard from his grip
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from his gauntlet talons fly
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a gasp and groan sounds as that haggard
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as that falcon wilds away
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away
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in anger goes a gauntlet thrown
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at sight of haggard one-way flown
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two haggards now are each alone
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one elated one disowns
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a grave and gaunt-faced falconer
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gazing at receding speck
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no freedom can be felt at all
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on the one hand
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Originally from the French: wild, trapped, adult  falcon.. nearly intractable to training.  Later took on the aspect of  "anxious, tense".  Nowadays haggard means yet another thing.. but still "wild looking", withal.  

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13 Apr 05

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i think it's very good. that's what i think. kill the formatting. the bold is really distracting.

-noodleman
 — unknown

thanks, sir.  the bold fonting of the footnote is turned off.  obliged to you, netsky.
 — unknown

OOH I so loved the way you played with the words gaunt and gauntlet .It was like a gold thread snaking in and out of a tapestry.
 — SharonH

so, what this comes from:  a daily feature offered by Merriam Webster..  each day comes some new word.  The interest is in the etymology given for the word (usually).   Here the poem was made mostly by adopting/mixing the original and the some of the modern sensings.   I use Word of Today to give me ideas for subject-word poetry.  You all can do the same if you want "free ideas" and inspirations for your poems, too.

in next comment is the WoT that impelled this poem.  thanks.  -netskyiam=net sky-
 — unknown

The Word of the Day for April 12 is:

haggard • \HAG-urd\ Audio icon • adjective
1 of a hawk : not tamed
2 a : wild in appearance *b : having a worn or emaciated appearance : gaunt

Example sentence:
When Stacey saw Ed's haggard face and disheveled appearance, she knew something must be terribly wrong.

Did you know?
"Haggard" comes from falconry, the sport of hunting with a trained bird of prey. The birds used in falconry were not bred in captivity until very recently. Traditionally, falconers trained wild birds that were either taken from the nest when quite young or trapped as adults. A bird trapped as an adult is termed a "haggard," from the Middle French "hagard." Such a bird is notoriously wild and difficult to train, and it wasn't long before the falconry sense of "haggard" was being applied in an extended way to a "wild" and intractable person. Next, the word came to express the way the human face looks when a person is exhausted, anxious, or terrified. Today, the most common meaning of "haggard" is "gaunt" or "worn."

*Indicates the sense illustrated in the example sentence.
 — unknown

Hey it is  circular from the last line leading back into the first. It is a  poetry trap  quoth the Raven  evermore quoth the Raven evernmore quoth the Raven....
 — unknown

Hi Netsky,

I am not sure if I actually agree with my friend Netsky on his etymology of haggard.
Haggard has been around since Saxon times, being a farmers boy, I recall the stack yards being called (and still are, I believe) the Haggard, from the old English ‘haga’ meaning field and ‘geard’ meaning yard.
We do have ‘hager in German, which means lean.
In Welsh ‘hagyr’ meaning ugly, and is I believe from ‘Hag meaning to cut or hack roughly.

Life is never simple in the English language, I wish I had gone to school more often, but teachers sent me home for swearing at them in Gaelic, I often wonder how they knew.
However, it never failed to work.

Be back later on this one.

Best regards Netsky.

Morchuis
 — unknown

Hi Morty, I only "know" what I worked from: that Merriam Webster def. applied above.  How much more interesting to learn it is probably incomplete and that "haggard" goes back futher and more variously than from the stated source.  

Before you applied here, and before I went to sleep some hours ago, I got curious enough to google a few key words en group:  "haggard falconer gaunt"  The third result, brings up a pile of poems attributed to Edward De Vere/Earle of Oxenforde.


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http://www.elizabethanauthors.com/oxfordpoe ms.htm




10. If women could be fair and yet not fond       &nbs p;  (Woman's Changeableness)
     &nb sp; [song lyrics]

    If women could be fair and yet not fond,
    Or that their love were firm not fickle, still,
    I would not marvel that they make men bond,
    By service long to purchase their good will;
    But when I see how frail those creatures are,
    I muse that men forget themselves so far.

    To mark the choice they make, and how they change,
    How oft from Phoebus do they flee to Pan,
    Unsettled still like haggards wild they range,
    These gentle birds that fly from man to man;
    Who would not scorn and shake them from the fist
    And let them fly fair fools which way they list.

    Yet for disport we fawn and flatter both,
    To pass the time when nothing else can please,
    And train them to our lure with subtle oath,
    Till, weary of their wiles, ourselves we ease;
    And then we say when we their fancy try,
    To play with fools, O what a fool was I.
       &nbs p;                 &n bsp;       &nbs p;                 &n bsp;       &nbs p;     Finis. Earle of Oxenforde.

Sources: Fuller's #19 [Fayre Fooles] ; JTL #19
From Rawlinson MS 85 Folio 16
A variation printed as a song lyric by Oxford - by Byrd in 1587
Prof. May lists this poem as "possibly" by Oxford.
Note: This poem has important literary connections

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netsky again:  song nuber one is even sweeter, though unrelated to the topic at hand.   I need to find a "shepard swain".   Mark my words:  MFine should do just fine!
 — unknown

A couple of typos.. I meant "number", and etc.  I drop letters, being dyslexi-blind a bit, myselfy.

TETTO sofware -corrupts- links   

To work the Elizabethan link above one must copy, paste manually and -remove the "%20" auto-inserts to ruin links for what reason I do not know
 — unknown

The concept is inspiring--haven't been writing much lately, so inspiration is needed.
The rhythm and structure make this fun to read aloud.
I especially like the lines that stand alone.
"sounds" I think could be something stronger, something that adds alliteration or stronger internal rhyme, or, in keeping with the theme, something that flys.
As is, it certainly does not offend.
 — housepoppy

go forth and prosper nets

badge :o)
 — unknown

As like a weed,
I grow and stir,
from ground to arbor
for your for her
affections water
coarse dandelion.
Bound up I may
by your two leaves?
to pin red badge of poppy seeds
upon the breasts of
yours and hers.
I thank you, Madam.
And also, Sir.
 — netskyIam

Wow, the way you explained your thoughts in lines 8 to 14 are GOLD! Nice job.
 — EdwardDurden

nets a dandy/lion lol

B.
 — unknown

net may be a "dandylion" and all that implies, applies, but here is a rather straightforward verse/vignette and not a fleck of fat or innuendo or preciousness is really to be found in it.  Nonetheless, I do dandy up some of my comic poems in risque dress. Not here.  But have at it, haggards-mine (?)  thanks for your helps, though, really .  Much appreciated, all.  
 — netskyIam

I hate poetry but yours is good
 — unknown

on the other hand

dick cheney does a really good rendition of this
 — unknown

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