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you’re serenading the red light
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you’re serenading the red light
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my eyes swell up and fold
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moisture into blue lined lids with a
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sweeping blink of black lashes as
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you turn the music right and right till
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its nothing but noise and you singing at the
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otherwise quiet night stretched so thin on stars
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with the dizzy feeling of lust that in it
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I must admit on those lines of white I’m caught
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wishing that this moment would end,
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that this collapse would just crash around me
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fast and now so I can get on with pretending
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that love is nothing but a cleverly
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disguised panic attack.
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13 Apr 05

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Oh, I love this poem . . . the allusions are quite lovely and work well (for me at least) and the image of a panic attack at the end  . . . very clever in its truth (scary too).  You remind me of my own poetry.  Lovely work, I love it!  Thank you!
maria
 — slancho

lahvely!
 — Kauf

Great poem witha sweeping power.Shook me right up this early morning
 — larrylark

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