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There Were Always Strings Attached
dmartin

A puppeteer with such a sad face,
 1
sees the world and can’t take much in,
 2
pulls the curtain back
 3
to just get burnt by daylight.
 4
 
 
When and where is Main and Mayhem?
 5
Which way is out of town?
 6
I’m bowing out of this last performance,
 7
I’ll exit quiet without a sound
 8
 
 
You’ve got the world by a string,
 9
you’ve got him on a leash.
 10
But here’s the thing,
 11
you’ve got me hanging by a noose.
 12
 
 
For once I’m naïve and stupid,
 13
caught between third and home.
 14
So play your games,
 15
from here, you’re forever alone.
 16
 
 
Your playhouse is a whorehouse,
 17
you can’t keep faces straight.
 18
I won’t play cat and mouse,
 19
you can just fornicate yourself
 20
 
 
You’ve got the world by a string,
 21
you’ve got him on a leash.
 22
But here’s the thing,
 23
you’ve got me hanging by a noose.
 24
 
 
Reprimand the days you spoke out of turn
 25
after I would spill my heart.
 26
Drop into oblivion the times
 27
we claimed as the happiest on earth.
 28
 
 
You’ve got the world by a string,
 29
you’ve got him on a leash.
 30
But here’s the thing,
 31
I’m still here hanging by a noose.
 32
 
 
…It’s everything you deserve to be…
 33

14 Apr 05

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10 & 12 ought to rhyme.  They are out of place in an otherwise seamless rhyme sequence. Change it.  Something with 'breath' or 'belief', maybe 'between'. Lose 'yourself' in L20.  Change the 3rd to last stanza to somehow connect with the third and last.  Completely omit the last line.

I really like the story and the way you develop it.  I just don't understand how someone can deserve to be the puppeteer, pulling all the strings for the rest of us.  I don't like that last line at all.
 — themolly

i like this i do . but it gets a bit tedious. i might bring in the carnival glass.

thank you very much

edgar
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