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Ghosts of Rilke
Ananke

Ghosts of Rilke
 1
 
 
I.
 2
 
 
My companion knew that method,
 3
(products all having character
 4
which slowly silences the mass loneliness)
 5
 
 
“These hearts aren’t machines anymore.
 6
They can silently become the next generation.”
 7
When a heartbroken star steps into silence
 8
Three women will sluggishly die
 9
And give a town of brewing mouths
 10
full rancid gossip.
 11
 
 
Outside, snow. Inside, laughing
 12
through immense plastic industrial corridors
 13
while drifts blanket sound in.
 14
When I grow old
 15
I’ll abandon my orchards,
 16
Fire tongues fill with gray ash
 17
until falling won’t still bring death,
 18
But begin our walking
 19
toward unknowable noises together.
 20
 
 
II.
 21
 
 
I’m pressed thin to where
 22
scarce on faith,
 23
on time,
 24
no inheritors are fleeing.
 25
 
 
These infinite waters, growing…
 26
I am to break but forgot
 27
the judgments I’ve read.
 28
Ashen poverty, street faces
 29
You despise me.
 30
 
 
One boy, chocolate brown eyes-
 31
he wants, steals figs, fruit juices.
 32
You discovered his song was your own.
 33
 
 
It reaches your cancer,
 34
one hundred years and alone,
 35
and remains through mad thoughts
 36
rivers in night
 37
 
 
We want what long trials and
 38
rivers and years (more lifetimes)
 39
don’t give- groping, grasping
 40
because under something
 41
we sometimes find
 42
subtlety as it growls.
 43
 
 
III.
 44
 
 
Her wrinkled hands breathe life,
 45
blow dust away, laughing at death’s
 46
tall skinny framework.
 47
 
 
The years are passing.
 48
A yearling grows with
 49
what happens through lifetimes,
 50
yet hopelessly starving,
 51
thinned old books of nature’s hand.
 52
 
 
Squaw makes the herd run
 53
away that once fell
 54
beneath rising and castle like mountains
 55
 
 
Morning’s light.
 56
We saw images of things she loved with ease
 57
and wants to love still
 58
and she began to die.
 59

26 Feb 03

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line 6, wow
 — unknown

runs on...
 — unknown

(depth)
 — ein

Amazing. I love this. There is so much good in there, I can't dig it all out. Line 8 is just the most amazing line ever written, and the simple use of 'together' in line 20 brings a happy tear to my eye. Line 33, as well, is phenomenally poignant. The stanza with the yearling, also, is a favourite of mine. Very good poem, thank you.
 — Moose

it reminds me vaguely of michelle branch. only it's so much more clever, and...well. Michelle's songs are usually about as deep as a puddle, at the most.
 — classy_ha

thank you moose. coming from you, that means a lot :)

classy- a stab to my heart! I abhor michelle branch! ay me! lol
 — Ananke

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