| Beat (because it's cool to rage)
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| I want to be a beat poetess. | 1 |
Totally self-absorbed and | 2 |
unaware, completely aloof, | 3 |
with filtered cigarettes and | 4 |
long, straight, baked brown | 5 |
boring hair. I want to be a | 6 |
wordcrafter, to melt sentences | 7 |
down to a foaming figurative froth, | 8 |
slide out of sticky situations | 9 |
softly, supple, simple, and | 10 |
sylphlike. To acquit myself | 11 |
of all charges of being | 12 |
dewy-eyed, thin-thighed, | 13 |
word-vied, tie-dyed, | 14 |
steal myself away from | 15 |
slick dealing, quick stealing, | 16 |
low talking, fast walking | 17 |
stiff suited stick men. To | 18 |
wash these clothes clean of | 19 |
'std's, 'gop's, 'abc's, 'qed’s, | 20 |
'nbc’s, the last breath of sex tv. | 21 |
I want to be a beat poetess, | 22 |
one that ignored all the reality | 23 |
(the hopelessness of humanity), | 24 |
and brush aside the actuality | 25 |
of the millions of casualties | 26 |
in a war of no necessity | 27 |
in a world of one-sided generosity. | 28 |
I want to be a beat poetess so | 29 |
I can close my eyes and recite | 30 |
my rhymes and not worry that | 31 |
verses may exist for some reason, | 32 |
not worry about Time, or treason, | 33 |
to live in love and not see the season, | 34 |
that the winter is hot now, | 35 |
and summer grows hotter, | 36 |
that the media is strong, | 37 |
but big business is stronger. | 38 |
Lives are sweetened | 39 |
by splendor and hot water, | 40 |
and nothing is everything | 41 |
if you’re beat poetry’s daughter. | 42 |
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18 Apr 05 |
Rated 8.7 (7.9) by 5 users.
Active (5): 8, 8, 9, 10, 10, 10
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love, love , love this! totally got it and appriciate what you did here. this is going in my faves.
— bowie
congratulations
— kaleidazcope
ahhh, love this. :)
— 8Gj00
Wow.......I love it.
— smugzy
good
great
wonderful
...
this is going on my favorites lyke whoah
— Slip
Yes
— SharonH
Just so fine. A young person makes a social stand by denying the Establishment (or whatever it was called in 1950) Retreat into beat, poetess. I like. Just so fine. thank you1
— netskyIam
thats a pretty
good poem
— noodleman
(so ill give you a fat score)
— noodleman
amazing... purely amazing
I envy your thoughts
— pokeAdot
fun.
— colevaughn
ahh- but the title...it is fun to use parenthesis, but put something more in them. Still a fun poem, though. Can hear the upright bass already...
— colevaughn
endnote upon further reflection: a true beat poetess, however, would never repeat 'i want' as much as you have here. clean up a bit and the flow will improve immeasurably. and in the beat poem flow is everything.
— noodleman
thanks, but the "I want"s are there for a reason.
— unknown
Ack. I gave in and changed some "I want to"'s.
— unknown
intersecting......
— unknown
Almost reminds me of something Ani DiFranco would write, I am jealous of your words and envy you at the moment.
— MissMay
eh.....
— unknown
this reminds me to take out the trash
— unknown
Your rhythm and images are strong.
I like the voice too.
Nice.
— Krttika
looove
— tragicbubble
yay good.
— noodleman
Holy shit.
— megabyte
holy shmoly. i LOVE this! like MissMay said, this reminds me of something Ani DiFranco would write, and she is amazing. wow. i love reading this out loud, too. yes, i just sat here and read it out loud twice! :)
great work.
— woman_power
oh, and it's now in my favoites :)
— woman_power
Awesome, adding to favorites!!
No suggestions, oh just one, keep writing always ;)
— warsager
I want to be a
6
wordcrafter, to melt sentences
7
down to a foaming figurative froth,
8
slide of out sticky situations
9
softly, supple, simple, and
10
sylphlike.
Do you mean out of?
You say stick and sticky a lot.
It's nice... overdone, but I suppose it's meant to be that way. GJ.
-Zr
— ramher
baked brown boring hair.....awesome
— kitkat
HEHEHA NICE
— unknown
Thank you, thank you, and thank you.
Rahmer - thank you for spotting the typo.
— etcetera
awesome, and one of my favorites.
— pull_my_hair
I did not want to like this. I don't particularly care for the use of ((()))! But in this case, it is done for comedic effect, and I can appreciate that.
Lovely Lavish Words. Thanks
— BoundFeet
The rest of us can't, no doubt.
Nice work, enjoyed.
— Kauf
favorite! I want to memorize this and repeat it to myself while walking around or sitting on the bus!
— leukothea
Wow! I love this. The alliteration and other techniques you used fit well with what you were tyring to get out.
This made me picture a mousy brown haired girl with a beret and cool shades snapping to the poem.
Haha
=D
— carox3
love this
— bloodytearsx
Love the sentiment but a few things don't follow. l13 or l18, I would find a different word instead of using stick twice. l25- brushed, follow through on the tense of that thought or begin a new sentence if you must. l33- sentence fragment ? And in the end you say that you want to "not see [...] that nothing is everything if you're beat poetry's daughter." but really, you just don't want to see all of the big business global warming stuff, and you know that nothing is everything if you're a beat poetess. So yeah, god poem, just needs to be thought about a little more- even though that's not what you want to do.
— Cloudless
kayp thank youp
— unknown
Amazing, i give it a well deserved 10.
I smile when i read this, I love all the rhym
— forevergone
This is really good. Bursting with ideas and goes along rythmically very well.
— larrylark
I want to be a beat poetess, 22
one that ignored all the reality 23
(the hopelessness of humanity)
a hug by a willing beat poet.
— lazyduck187
I liked this poem a lot, in the delightful way it bends the rules and yet gives a true composite of understanding.
The line I did not like was 33 it appeared totally out of context and did nothing to enhance the poem.
I would have preferred something with a deeper significance.
“not worry about Time, or treason,”
Nor worry about Time’s, own lesion
to live in love and ne’er see the season,
Just a thought, nice piece of poetry, I enjoyed it.
Morchuis
— Mor
i was going to say you got your wish
but kaleidazcope beat me.
just suggest you remove the parenthetical hint of insecurity from the title.
it's a good poem. dont apologize in any [way shape or] form.
— gnormal
thank yous, thank all of yous.
I've been gradually going through and primping. I like the lameness of the parenthetical bit in the title, though I imagine I'll update the contents of the parenthesis every once in a while. It's unavoidable that in the end I'll get rid of them all together.
— etcetera
Very good, I appreciate the work you've done here.
— kaze
this is fantastic. this is great. I LOVE IT! u should post somewhere on the internet where everyone can see it, i mean, this is the greatest piece of poetry ever! goin to my favorites!
— unbreakable
oh, and have a 10.
— unbreakable
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