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I Love You
pjr_porch

I Love You.
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Three words i thought i'd never speak.
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Love was a fairytale. Never happened to me.
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Then i met you.
 4
 
 
I Love You.
 5
A feeling i thought i'd never experience.
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I felt so hollow. So incomplete.
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Then i met you.
 8
 
 
I Love You.
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Whenever i think of you i feel warm.
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I used to feel cold. So alone.
 11
Then i met you.
 12
 
 
I Love You.
 13
Whenever i look at you i feel giddy.
 14
Anticipating your touch. Your kiss.
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I'm glad i met you.
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I Love You.
 17

ok, so this is my 1st attempt at trying 2 express myself in a not-so-depressive way...

18 Apr 05

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it's a good first not-so-depresisive attempt.  Seeing "I Love You" so many times in a poem gives it a chessy appearance. Try replacing 2nd-5th " I Love You"s with a description of a warm body part,  and in line 14, replace giddy with any other word.  and  keep writing!
 — unknown

In all the 'i met you's is the 'i' supposed to be lowercase? Because it's consistently lowercase in that phrase but uppercase everywhere else.
 — soda482

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