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ancestral change
netskyIam

a whimsy

.
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I'm one quarter Irish and another quarter germ.
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Plus a shilling of John Bull
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and tuppence of the Scots
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plus the final phennig of The Lost Jew.
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the makers of a beggar
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All past, all gone.
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In resume, I'm residue
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of Paul Brown, the inventor of
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air motors for player pianos;
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for non-players to riff the aires
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by pumping pedals instead of keys.
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inventor of the "wind motor", 1889
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to scroll the paper music rolls
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And from the tree, too, came a Pear-
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son, my first cousin, twice removed.
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He did much write in social sense
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although his given name was Drew.
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Drew Pearson, a journalist and novelist.
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These ancestors ran short on cash;
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you read their only farthing left,
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impoverished in grace and rhyme,
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left begging alms upon the street
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and vending thoughts for very little
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in a one-way free exchange.
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20 Apr 05

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Netsky, this is a great reflection. I enjoyed it very much. Amazing what cool things you find laying around when you look. I'm an amateur genealogist and so this resonates with me.
 — ka

Wow! I really like this. I love lines 2-6 - so cleverly done and to great effect.

The whole of this has an air of poignancy that smooths the edges of its cleverness.

Line 17 only line that jars - he did much write - a little unnatural to me
Line 25 should this start uppercase?

But I do like this very much
 — smugzy

you dont change my opinion
you still suck
 — nicolecote

I like the last verse the best.  It seems the most concrete and says it all.

I like the rest, just find it all rather strangely put.
 — Isabelle5

revizzed april 7 '06.
 — netskyIam

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