| TREFINA
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themolly
| I wish I were a mergirl, | 1 |
No air for me to breathe. | 2 |
Soaring like flight through waters, | 3 |
with sharks hawking me. | 4 |
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Only a black-blue-green-gray | 5 |
varies subtle night to day. | 6 |
Bathing cool. | 7 |
The hot light so far away. | 8 |
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22 Apr 05 |
Rated 6.5 (5.6) by 6 users.
Active (6): 10, 10, 10
Inactive (8): 1, 1, 1, 2, 2, 5, 5, 7, 8, 8, 8
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L2 not = no?
L3 is sort of awkward but i like the sharks hawking idea.
drop the a in L5.
— youthculture
I originally had no in L2, but for some reason I decided to change it.
— themolly
for some reason you should change it back! :D
watch out for them sharks, girl.
— noodleman
how extremely straight forward of you, noodle. ok.
— themolly
does anyone have an opinion on the title? I'm sort of surprised no one has mentioned it.
— themolly
i dont know what it means but i like it. the pome, too. esp line 7. you rite gud molly-lady.
— noodleman
Tanks noodle
— themolly
Interesting title, what does it mean?
— HeidiHo
Trefina was one of Cleopatra's sisters. The jealous one.
— themolly
I like this.
— unknown
THANKS
— unknown
cleopatra had a bitchy sister? and this is about her, how?
— unknown
the lengths you'll go to try to get me down. such a pitiful waste of energy
— unknown
YEAH RIGHT
— BoundFeet
WOW. I can't stop saying it. I am so glad you introduced me to this website.
— tiedtoes
I love this.
— Estrella
The rhyming is done horribly. It's not a very good poem. Sorry.
— marchhare
you don't know diddly, little girl.
— themolly
You don't even have any poetry posted, so I have no choice but to conclude you are a talentless sap with loose lips. Curb your harsh tongue, little one, or else realize you are asking for the hell I will rain down upon you.
— unknown
ouch.
— unknown
I enjoyed this.
— Hear
that's nice. what did you like?
— unknown
Yeah! I'm finding all these poems about real, hidden-"mythical" people and things on here finally! I thought I was the only one writing of paranormal wonders. This is far prettier than your rating-average. Wow, the sharks hawking is amazing, and there are good ones too, don't forget, although your line is genius and fits right as is. I wouldn't change a thing. There's a reason for you being human. Make it right so being a mergirl later if you really want to be is even better, and don't forget to protect Nature for all those merfolks and others out there in the same place just "inside" the ordinary world on different waves and for yourself. If you earn it, they'll let you see them or communicate in one way or another also although earning it means excellent, high Nature ethics and long term devotion to such.
Best wishes for an oceanic serenity and deep comfort in your life when you need it. -C
— unknown
What's the curb your harsh tongue stuff about and the threats of Hell-fire? You better be able to prove that case, unknown "commenter", or you've just committed a substantial crime and may find yourself railroaded into the Sun instead. -C
— unknown
thank you very much C.
Your words are appreciated.
— unknown
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