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whichever is more comforting
stateofmind

[pause] and he
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flickers like a light switch
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fluttering frantically at the edge
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he's
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shuffling for the meaning behind the dial tone.
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he
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lives the paradox of
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the loneliness in crowds.
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24 Apr 05

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i like it
 — tragicbubble

the flow is really great, I actually felt the pause in L 1.
the fact that its short is smart, too. it doesn't seem as if its meant to be a story, just an observation.
great work.
 — imahabit

I edited this.
 — stateofmind

So its a male, now. I like it like this, better. Its got a sense of distance.
 — imahabit

It was actually originally a male.
 — stateofmind

this is good. very good. i would comment more, but i just woke up and am not very eloquent. will come back to this again later. but i really like this.
 — sabz3003

Thank you for the feedback.
 — stateofmind

I apologize, in that case. I thought it was a female at first.
 — imahabit

i like. <3
 — missmurder
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