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the oral (mis)interpretation

he spoke in rhythms that no one understood	1
this start again stop again walk again fall again	2
tripping melody of verbal car crashings	3
into my head were the things he said	4
in this cognitive dissonance	5

and i grasped at the air	6
with the words floating	7
on their vibrations	8
of sound and conflict	9

and i tried to hold on	10
to just one uttering	11
so i could toss it	12
into my mouth	13
and try to	14
taste what	15
it felt like	16
and feel what	17
he meant by it	18

and maybe i could explain it all	19
and maybe i could clarify	20
i could bridge these gaps these	21
gaps the bridges were too	22
small to fill, to big of gaps	23
growing	24
farther apart	25

as he continued proclaiming	26
his message of somethingness	27
i think i heard the words	28
"mansion","girl" and "thug"	29
As for them.	30
they sat, vision distorted	31
by the very words he used	32
to try to clarify his	33
given statement	34
of reality	35

2 Mar 03

Rated 8 (7.8) by 2 users.

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Brilliant. Loved the first and third stanzas particularly.
— Ananke

i am not sure if i like lines 28-29.
— username

great flow. i too enjoyed the first and third stanzas. very nice.
— unknown

Yes, this flows very well. The lack of punctuation was a good call.
— Moose

wow. this is so great. I didn't like 28-30 when I first read them, but by the end I loved them again. this poem is so amazing. The third stanza (10-18) in particular makes my draw drop.
— unknown

jaw.
— unknown

Really loved loved loved the third stanza. Great poem!
— unknown

I really liked this one. 10-18 is quite good and could stand on its own. Your stuff is good and this is one to be proud of.
— unknown

I like 6-18, like nearly everyone else. Beautiful.
— Mai

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