| The Japanese Girl / with the munchies
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unknown
| The Japanese Girl | 1 |
with the munchies: | 2 |
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"I am so honey" | 3 |
she wishpered. | 4 |
and i knew she was. | 5 |
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"I have dry mouse" | 6 |
she breathed. | 7 |
and i felt that this was true. | 8 |
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"But I'm bit hungry," | 9 |
she bit, | 10 |
by bit, | 11 |
and all i could do was smile. | 12 |
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4 Mar 03 |
Rated 8.7 (8.1) by 9 users.
Active (9): 4, 7, 8, 9, 9, 10, 10, 10
Inactive (9): 3, 7, 7, 7, 7, 8, 8, 8, 10, 10
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(7 users consider this poem a favorite)
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Comments:
what a statement on american-japanese relations and worldview. how cute!
— C
lmao....that was really cute...hahahha
— xsadxstarx
I love the first 5 so much.
— unknown
This makes me hungry. It's Very Close, so everything feels on breaths. My compliments.
— semaj
thats awseome.
— thinknerd
I love this poem that just came up random. I can see the scene and feel the accent. Splendid piece!!!!
— davidm
I agree this is well done!
I'm not too keen on the bit x 3 in l9-11, tho.
but that's just me.
— beatbitch
I like "wishpered" heheheh.
— SeraphSoul
this made me laugh out laud and re-read it five times smiling hard. this was joyous.
— warsager
youre right bb. it bugs me too. i have to think up something else...
— gnormal
i like the bit x3, works for me.
— warsager
yeah i just changed it. i removed "chomping" so the three bits seem to work ok now.
— unknown
no name poet?
— warsager
it's mine.
— gnormal
well it's absolutely perfect
— warsager
forget it ......
— unknown
I don't get it?!?!?!?!?!
— unknown
cute
— unknown
This poem made me smile hard.
— OKcomputer
Odd. In a good way.
— unknown
i like it a lot. however i'm not too keen on the leaving the "i"s that refer to you uncapitalised, seeing as you capitalised the ones that refer to her. i don't really see the desired effect.
— aerol
I can't believe I never commented on this. Oh, maybe because I wasn't on site then.
This reminds me so much of the movie Full Metal Jacket. But not exactly, which is good because that was sleazy and this is just funny.
— Isabelle5
lol
— unknown
Very good poem
— unknown
wishpered
— unknown
mousey
— unknown
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— unknown
love it.
but why unknown?.
— unknown
wishpered is deliberate? if so i love this word joining
love line 3
— Mongrol
haha.
brilliant.
i love how it makes me question every single word in the poem and derive a million possible meanings, none of which are intended probably, but the possibility of them gives the poem that much more.
— sophiesword
wish/purred - fantastic
read this many times but never commented, just great great communication
thanks!
— unknown
^ so why unknown, how can the thanks be reciprocated.
— sir_I_clan
this would be big in English-speaking circles
in Japan.
silly and good, gnormal.
: )
— fractalcore
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