| my girlfriends girlfriends underwear
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| are friendly red | 1 |
match her lips | 2 |
enjoy daylight when she stretches | 3 |
appear to make her uncomfortable | 4 |
hook me all afternoon | 5 |
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wake me up | 6 |
feel like she | 7 |
so downy and bounce | 8 |
are invisible to my girl | 9 |
who laughing left us | 10 |
alone for a spell | 11 |
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when peeled back show marks | 12 |
where elastic bites | 13 |
her hip flesh all day long | 14 |
touched my fingers there | 15 |
smash down the fresh grass | 16 |
hold a smile | 17 |
roll into a tiny loop | 18 |
light as her laugh | 19 |
useless to her now | 20 |
in a field | 21 |
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fit right in my fist | 22 |
when happy she returns | 23 |
a little missed | 24 |
taking time off | 25 |
no longer show | 26 |
but she doesnt know | 27 |
wont protect her | 28 |
from the anxious skirt wool | 29 |
and the cool air under a table | 30 |
love wandering why | 31 |
where we sit three smiling | 32 |
telling stories to the sky | 33 |
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this morning in her drawer | 34 |
now feel a coal in my pocket | 35 |
burning a hole in my thigh | 36 |
make the coffee a wine | 37 |
hot as the sun on their heads | 38 |
and mine | 39 |
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29 Apr 05 |
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i am pretty sure that this is an amazing fucking piece of writing.
— unknown
^noodleman
— unknown
i think i'll just savor this writing
cause it's beautiful
— Bloodfetish
beautifle wording (not sure I personally like the subject) NEVER CHANGE THIS POEM!!!
— spicy_sugar
I have to agree with the others--->
This kicks ass.
— Krttika
If you comment as unknown, pls let me know if you are m or f.
If you think your crit could be more honest as unknown, please do that!
What feeling does it give you?
BTW, there is a tiny story here and I'm interested if it can be read.
If you think you pretty much get what i'm going for, i'd love to hear any suggestions for improvement.
Thank you!
— unknown
if you post a poem as unknown please let us know if you are M or F.
— unknown
??? why would the writer's gender matter?
— Bloodfetish
"love wandering why" nice.
— unknown
Are the words in l4+5 purposely mixed up? and im not sure about l6-9. I really love the rest of the poem though, especially 12-20, the elastic marks make this so realistic and wonderful, and them turning into burning coals in your pocket. Very nice.
— unknown
the words were supposed to be mixed up. but i nixed that idea.
— unknown
well, dont get me wrong, i loovvee this poem, but the story i get fro it, is that you were at a party with your girlfriend, fell for her friend, you hooked up, didnt tell your girlfriend, became close friends with both of them, stayed with your girlfriend, but kept your girlfriends friends panties... but thats probably not it at all...--->F.
— unknown
great. that's it. except it wasnt a party.
just hanging out on a sunny saturday.
and i didnt fall for her. i was just electrified
for a day, and a poem.
— unknown
to tell you the truth, it didnt happen.
i dont even have a girlfriend!
it's all fiction. just trying to communicate
that "that girl's underwear" feeling.
— unknown
yeah, that girls underwear feeling.. i guess some girls like it. It's truely form before function.
— john
Secretive and sinful, deliciously playful and mean at the same time. Not a great fan of infidelity but I like the writing here.
— Isabelle5
you have no shame and why should you,great poem with an unusual slant
— larrylark
i dont know why i kinda like this..hmm...but i like this...except that..i dont like "panties" on the tittle...
— inc_reign
I think the underwear should be white, or yellow. Don't ask me why....just don't fit with the sunny field. hmm.
kk (F)
— unknown
Belongs in a porn mag, not a poetry site. Poems like this lower the tone.
— Roz
thanks roz, we just LOVE the poetry police who protect our site from poetry they are so confident is 'low'. this is in the top 10% of poems on this whole site. did you even read it? or did the 'underwear' blind you.
that's how i felt too.
— unknown
This poem made me hate poetry.
— Roz
Wow.....it just seems so real.....creates brilliant imagery in my head......great use of creativity in ur brain....
— UrbanAng3l
Roz, you are a totatl jerk! I think you are just insecure because I've read your poetry and it sucks. You need to lay off people and keep your nasty freaking thoughts to yourself. If you can say something constructive keep your stupid mouth shut!
— unknown
i hate it when guys steal my underwear. like, it's pretty expensive, you know?
— unknown
Hang on a second Roz has no poems?...
— UrbanAng3l
Beautiful poem! ^^
— Nebetsu
Missed this , nicely done . Can we have some more please ?
— unknown
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