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In Some Places Its Still Considered Homicide
dmartin

I bought a round-trip ticket
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for a one way flight, and
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couldn't sit still
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the whole way to chicago.
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I spent months there,
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and sent letters to you
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about how I'd never had
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so much fun, about
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how the city night
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lit up like your eyes
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the first night we met
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at the fair Augusts ago.
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I signed them
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better off without you,
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knowing all too well
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this was as empty as
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a maple tree in late November.
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But when that summer ended,
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I headed home,
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back to being comfortable.
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When I knocked, he answered
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and suddenly the season changed.
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I walked away as the door creaked shut,
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an era closed forever in a casket.
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30 Apr 05

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i really like this piece. it makes me feel all too familiar.

but it's 'comfortable' in l20.
 — shakeit

Thanks shakeit, and good spot on the error...
 — dmartin

good stuff
 — unknown

This is very nice.
Lines 16-17
and the last stanza,
my favorites.
 — Krttika

thatnk you krittika
 — dmartin

i like this piece, ive felt that way before, i can relate
 — NathanSimms

the title hurts. but in here that's a good thing.
 — listen
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