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Beach Air at Midnight
Isabelle5

He rose at midnight, waking me.
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I watched him dress,
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reading subtle cues
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that it was time
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for me to go.
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Turned aside his offer
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to walk me to my car
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but let him hold me
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tightly for a moment of farewell.
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I didn't stop to put on
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my strappy heels,
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carried them and warming lotion
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in my hands,
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stepping barefooted
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on cool damp pavement,
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the tang of salt air
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whispering curls
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into my hair.
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Driving home,
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I realized that life
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is always mixed
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this way for me -
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love and loss
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given gently
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in the same
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warm and somehow
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treacherous embrace.
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2 May 05

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Warming lotion makes you sound, to put it frankly, like a slut. Nice poem though, and maybe thats just my opinion.
 — Cloudless

okay ... i'm blushing ... very good, very sensual
very much a pleasant memory
 — Bloodfetish

What's wrong with using warming oil with your lover??  It tastes rather good and sex should be fun and inventive!  
 — unknown

oh my. you made my pluck-head blog cloudless. well done. no one's made it in there for days, weeks, no months! not since shelby and inyourblood last made it in there.

"Warming lotion makes you sound, to put it frankly, like a slut."

ohh. my. love it.

and the poem ain't bad too. no suggestions.
 — kaleidazcope

Kleidy, you made my day!  Maybe my month!
 — Isabelle5

this amazing, i like it a lot , almost as much as i like icecream.
 — jittery

Beautiful, melancholy, but not bitterly so.  I slipped so easily into this scene and, now, I'm missing the ocean (among other things).
 — boothben

Great poem with for me the sinister undertones of one who may some day explode.

Larry dynamite Lark
 — larrylark

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