| I am afraid of Squirrels
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SweetPain
| Kill me and I won't scream because, | 1 |
it has been too long. | 2 |
Living life this way | 3 |
as a vagrant piece of driftwood, | 4 |
being shifted around by the waves of addiction. | 5 |
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Which blur the lines of sanity | 6 |
(they have never been quite clear). | 7 |
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Soon I wish to be beached. | 8 |
Have the padded nurse pick me up, | 9 |
and send me to my rigid room. | 10 |
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the title was inspired by a scene in Patch Adams. |
3 May 05 |
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have the padded nurse pick me up and send me to my rigid room.
— hank
nice poem.
— hank
changed the line, but i think i make change it back to the original but i will let this float around for a bit. thanx hank.
— SweetPain
this is excellentay
— noodleman
must agree wholeheartedly with everyone above.
squirrels are good good.
— kaleidazcope
This is very cool.
3-5 Perfect!
— Krttika
I think of whales in line 8, not squirels...
overall, however, I really liked this.
I would suggest something other than "and" for beginning of line 10.
— aforbing
wow thanks to noodleman, kaleidezcope, Krttika. and aforbing!!
your comment just made my DAY!!
— SweetPain
could be good and shorter
— bettalpha
okay, care to elaborate bettalpha?
— SweetPain
Your sentences are not sentences. Rework your punctuation!
— themolly
thanx themolly, is this better?
— SweetPain
molly shut up. you're irritating.
— unknown
that was very unecessary unknown, and if you are going to insult someone reveal your username at least!
— SweetPain
Man I hate it when folks hide behind the unknown...
I'll never meet you or care, so why does it matter if I know which user you are.....BECAUSE IT DOES. Don't be ashamed of your own opinions and poetry, poser.
And to Sweet,
MUCH MUCH BETTER.
Gracias
— themolly
There's something about Squirrels.
— Wix
hmmm...wow...i really like this a lot!! good job! :)
— woman_power
i JUST CANT BELIVE PPPL DONT TAKE THIS SERIOUSLY
— unknown
thanx a bunch themolly, Wix, women_power and unknown. Just a question to the last unknown, what are we not tkaing seriously?
— SweetPain
patch adams. amazing.
— unknown
interesting. but it is trying too hard. the first two lines are so overused. 8-10 reminder me of one flew over the cuckoo's nest. nice. 6 and 7 are ehh. maybe expand or rework.
— taintedtears
^^hey, now, what? i have a poem called tainted tears. why is that your username? is their any relevance, or is it merely a coincidence?
sorry sweetpain, this comment is a bit random, but they had no poems to comment under, and i didnt want to say anything in the forum.
i absolutely love lines 6 and 7
— Lia
lol thanks taintedtears, and Lia kinda confused about your comment but thanks anyways.
— SweetPain
Why, are they after your nuts?
— unknown
i dont you'd have to ask them.
— SweetPain
I got to enjoy a squirrel sitting near today. I wanted to photograph it but it was in the shade in an enchanting spot. So are you a nut? :)
Sanity is being aware of what's right and wrong and living rightly based on that. If you don't know in a situation or in regards, it would be sane to say that or know it at least to oneself. You seem like one of those who does perhaps know enough of the time but who accepts other's judgements when you may actually be more like blurred because of others' insane causations. Beached...:)
I could be wrong. To your good health, C
— unknown
wow you've got me figured out to a T, C. lol thanks for the insight, and the comments :D!
— SweetPain
I'm afraid I've not seen the scene
Which inspired you so
For I've never seen the movie
In which this scene was seen.
— 1994
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