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netsky rubs whiskers whilst trying to think of something epigramatically cleaver
netskyIam

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netsky rubs whiskers!
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and -that- is a puzzle!
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for his face is smooth!
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[it's a pubic stubble]
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The verse depends upon your -knowing the allusion to stroking whiskers:   in days of old when almost all men wore beards it was commonly seen that bearded men lost in thought were prone to stroke their chins.  And it was funny because the the beard stroker did this unconsciously, habitually.


4 May 05

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 — noodleman

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 — MFine

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 — netskyIam

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zzzzz>>>>///////////////////////////
(is a close shave good for you, too?)
 — netskyIam

:o
 — youthculture

dance, smooth baby!  
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now toss 'em side to side! Yeah!

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more!

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now,  take off that thong!


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OH, an -asian girl-, huh?





  
   &n bsp;
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 — netskyIam

-that last one?  a Rear View!
 — netskyIam

i love your poem
 — bettalpha

the word 'cleaver' in the title purposeful?
 — hank

Which means you now absently stroke your groin hair???  This is hilarious and frankly, I know a lot of men who stroke their chins now, hairless and otherwise, when lost in thought.
 — Isabelle5

the word 'cleaver' in the title purposeful?
– hank

yeah.  I use cheap, disposable razors and painful,  disposable puns far too often.  This is why my poems are more often nubbly than  nubile. (lol)

Which means you now absently stroke your groin hair???  This is hilarious and frankly, I know a lot of men who stroke their chins now, hairless and otherwise, when lost in thought.
– Isabelle5

I leave it allll up to the reader.  Being both silly, and lacking personal dignity, makes this poe-posturing possible.  And, uh,  -stubble- makes this posture -necessary- (grins and thanks to you both)

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 — netskyIam

This is so good. I think that's all I need to say.
 — Lia

I keep getting a bug by the same name as you and it impresses me just as much
 — unknown

Lia read this, and, like she wrote before, she still enjoys it.  She likes the hint of something naughty, without actually saying anything wrong. Rather clever, if you ask her.

Lia believes the footnote could be deleted, though.
 — Lia

cleaver?  What, like a butcher knife?

This is pretty damned hilarious....good intentions to boot!

Thanks.
 — themolly

too clever for me
 — unknown

nice poem
 — teddy

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