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Alien Evil Twin
larrylark

A walk away from work,
 1
bus stop beckoned.
 2
Noticed guy,strange
 3
look in  eye
 4
metallic grey pupils
 5
looked to be reckoning
 6
for size my stupified  brain.
 7
I.Q.,no one  behind,
 8
he was, in seconds.
 9
Felt a pain. Faint smell,
 10
fried offal fanned by flames.
 11
He moved into my face.
 12
Voice of one whose
 13
lost the power
 14
of human noise
 15
"Tell...me...the...way
 16
to...a ....place...i...can ...stay.
 17
 
 
 
 
His skin stretched
 18
like  dry husk
 19
of antique Egyptian king,
 20
tic pinged,roaming
 21
mechanically over
 22
his cheek. Finally
 23
saw the flaw,
 24
from the point
 25
of his jaw
 26
to the bridge of his nose
 27
Perfectly symmetrical face,
 28
two equal eyes
 29
each with a sty
 30
twin ears identified
 31
on the sides of his head
 32
mouth perfect, pouting, pursed.
 33
 
 
 
 
Spoke again like undertaker
 34
following a hearse.
 35
"Be ..awfully .... good ...chap...
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help me search..Lost...my map...
 37
Point ...me ...towards...
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Charing Cross ..meeting ..boss...
 39
..can't ..find ..it...on
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my..lap ..top..."
 41
His power point hand
 42
swept the sky.
 43
I turned to fly
 44
flicking tie watering my eye
 45
"Goodbye...goodbye...goodbye."
 46
Heard sound, distant buildings melting down,
 47
sunset crumpled,giant shadow
 48
covered the ground.
 49

5 May 05

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so much
i
eye
aye
it pulls one through to the end.
first stanza started balky ... a little slow
but i found the rhythm in the second and rode it through to the end
second and third readings, first stanza still plods a bit -- i think it's the hard k of beckoned and the softer f in fried offal (and "movement" into face) that make it a harder start ...

19-49 ay-ay-ay! (i like) (a lot)
 — Bloodfetish

Dear Bloodfetish

Thank you for the interesting analysis. I will look at the first stanza very carefully in the light of your constructive advice.

Larry
 — unknown

Lurve the title - reminds me of my brother
 — unknown

This is extremely good...why isn't on the top rated list?
 — orange

Dear Orange

Who knows?
 — unknown

Dear Unknown

Funny you should say that cus it reminds me of both my brothers


Larry evil alien triplet Lark
 — opal

I don't understand how opal is larrylark, but that last comment seems to indicate that. Crazy.
 — mindbodysoul

Hi mindbodysoul

You don't have to read something into everything. These are just a bunch of poems on a shiny screen and the only person i can see who writes any of them is opal.

Larry singular Lark
 — larrylark

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