| wait -a haiku
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hank
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inevitably becomes | 2 |
a very long time | 3 |
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21 May 05 |
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reading lines online
is like waiting for sunshine
at a funeral
xox
drew
— unknown
there was lots of sunshine for mersault's mother in camus' 'the outsider'
— hank
I like this. A lot.
— FangzOfFire
exactly. mersault's mother. you took the words right out of my mouth. i still remember when you scrawled impulsive poetry all over a copy of the outsider (the stranger) as we drove down to ko chang from bangkok. and then when you split you gave it to me as a gift. still got it somewhere. but what the fuck does the outsider have to do with this poem?
i'm not sure if this poem makes grammatical sense but it does capture the feeling of longing and waiting in vain so i'll say "bravo." did you write it on another copy of the outsider?
— ollylama
Senryu, you mean. Not haiku.
— unknown
olly, that was 'the fall'.
— hank
are you going to have heiny sex now?
— noodleman
tsk, tsk, noodle.
— hank
mmmm...makes me hungry for sushi.....
(which is japaneese...like a haiku...like this poem...get it? no? ok im done)
— TPTNW
pttttttttttttttttttft!
— noodleman
good poem by the way.
— noodleman
Nice poem.
— unknown
nice.
i wish i'd known about you sooner. your stuff is really good.
— listen
thanks listen.
— hank
it's my turn for the long time...
read this.
— varun
I wish the title didn't tell me it was a haiku.
This is one Empty haiku.
— WordsAndMe
A favourite!
— Seahorse
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